Sailor Ranko hardcore rewrite (no name yet)
Point:
To re-tell the story from the scratch, making it Darker and Edgier, based purely on mangas (with the Canon zealotry as a must) while weeding any fanon mercilessly. With Ranma-chan's hair vehemently black, no less.
This idea itches mightily, even if it would most probably be my undoing. Honestly, the chance of success is about the same as the chance of the Hubologist shuttle to reach the orbit.
But still, it itches insufferably.
My two reasons are:
1. I cannot stand all the fanon seeping out of every crevice in Sailor Ranko & sequels anymore.
2. I want a more suitable basis for my «Your Destiny is Annuled».
Premises:
*The events happen during the Black Moon arc SM-wise, post-Kumon Ryu, pre-Saffron R-wise.
*Ranma is NOT a wimp angsting about necessity to kill the enemies.
*The Senshi are of «shoot first, examine the smoking crater later» mindset as they are in the manga canon, with the mobility of a space fighter plane and corresponding powerlevels. Ranma is no match for them nor for their enemies when it comes to aerial or sub-orbital combat (Remember how did they finish Kunzite? SM fled straight up playing bait, he gave chase, the Inners followed him in turn. When they left the atmosphere, there was nowhere to hide for him and no hostages to threaten, so they just blasted him.)
*There are no reasonable plot devices to make the uber-rich girl Ami tutor a complete nobody - so this line gets dropped (there was a good one where Genma and Ami's mother knew each other and agreed to that to help each of their child's perspective problems. I'm not parroting it.)
The skeleton of the plot so far:
R&Ak walk through the park at night, patroling (remember, there are no cops in the Ranmavrse). The reason is the locals got scared after one local boy was found as a charred corpse. (The schoolgirls could gossip all they like about the «internal combustion» -- the locals are wiser, they «know» there must be evil spirits at work). Ranma has a bad feeling like he could almost remember something ugly happening.
R&Ak stumble onto Koan burning people for fun. Akane gets mild or medium burns trying to protect the small girl who still gets burned alive (like in the SM canon). Ranma kicks Koan's ass, but she teleports away with the help of her UFO. Ranma declares holy war on the bitch with the black crescent on her forehead.
Rei wakes up having seen the incident in her dream (vaguely). She is confused.
Ranma follows Akane to the hospital where she gets redirected to the Juuban hospital as it has a better equipped burns ward. Souun is informed by phone. He detonates scaring the living daylights out of everyone around him with a bankai-scale demon head. But then Genma manages to calm him down and explain that this way Ranma and Akane would stay together, away from the distractions. Genma paints a dramatic picture of Ranma quickly and inevitably falling for the injured Akane, Souun grabs onto the idea, both parents celebrate with tears of joy (and sadness for his hurt little girl, in the Souun's case).
Leaving the sleeping Akane Ranma goes on his quest for revenge alone as he properly assessed Koan's threat level and saw that any of his rivals and fiancees would end a smoldering husk in the first seconds of combat. But Akane figures him out and secretly decides to tag along... When the pain stops.
Meanwhile the Pink Abomination drives Usagi up the wall -- until she suddenly realizes she was angry at a little kid and feels ashamed of herself (Canon).
Ranma follows the trail of UFO sightings eventually zeroing in onto the Rei's school, what with the nuns with black crescents on their foreheads. The Canonical scene follows with Koan posing as one of the students and predicting for people their date of death during the school festival. Then things get different. When Koan confronts Sailor Mars Ranma is there, he goes close and personal and prevents Koan from trapping Mars in a flame barrier so she doesn't get kidnapped. Sailor Moon kills Koan just like she did in Canon, to Ranma's approval. Then Luna makes her entrance startling Ranma for a few seconds. The senshi use this distraction to disappear, not wanting to get him involved, for his own good (not knowing he's already involved). Ranma is left envious of the girls' power.
Akane sneaks out of the hospital blindly stumbling around until she comes to the Crown arcade, in a dire need to rest. There she makes friends with the girls, mostly Makoto. She tells them her story, they try to dissuade her from investigating further but she doesn't relent. They are all exasperated at her stubbornness. Eventually they tell her that there are such people as Sailor Senshi who have already dealt with the threat. Relieved, Akane loses the driving force that allowed her to walk around despite her injures. The girls say their good-byes as she is ambulancied back to the hospital. The stray pigtailed girl outside the windows finds this talk very interesting.
[Insert one more snippet of the SM canon involving Chibi-Usa, something that is very different from the anime]
When Ami helps to find the malfunctioning water pipe on the school grounds, Bertier states that dowsing without a pendulum is the work of the devil, just like she did the canon. When she turns to walk away, there's a a pig-tailed girl in the Juuban High uniform watching her.
Like in the canon, Bertier challenges Ami on TV to a chess match. When the battle begins, Bertier gets delayed by a pig-tailed girl and then killed by Sailor Moon without accomplishing anything. Mercury doesn't get kidnapped. Unfortunately for Ranma, this doesn't go unnoticed by Crimson Rubeus and Prince Demando who watched Bertier's progress.
*Beyond this point the Black Moon SM manga arc plot is FUBAR.
*Ranma understands the need to train Akane -- but they both fumble all their attempts
*Akane protects chibi-Usa at the cost of being kidnapped. BM demands that Ranma brings them The Gizmo. Really nasty choice.
*Ranma demands relentlessly to be given a fuku, learning the backstory in the process. In the end there _is_ a rune on her forehead but no one could recognize it.
*Luna discovers a record in the Moon mainframe about a sorceress who had a strong star seed but was refused the position as she wasn't of ideologically right mindset: she was driven by revenge and arrogance. She then went to the Sun in an insane and illegal attempt to make herself a soldier of the Sun. She was never seen again -- but short thereafter Metalia emerged from the sun. So as Ranma _could_ be her, they are reluctant of digging deeper. There's a possibility it was that sorceress who woke/gave birth to Metalia in her attempt. More, the rune means «rage/fore of chaos».
The sun is not evil nor good here, it's the embodiment of Chaos which gives us life but also takes it away. It gives power to exist, it gives power to burn yourself out. So is Sailor Sol's nature and the source of conflict between Ranma and the rest of the crew. Ranma represents a raging force of nature where SM represents the life's inherent desire to persist in spite of that force and continue on.
Should the nature of Ranma's power prohibit him from gaining the thousands of years lifespan with the rest of mankind who pledged their life to Neo serenity?
*Desperate Ranma tries to hijack someone of BMC during their teleport home using the Thousand Sea Fist. His infiltration fails and he is imprisoned in the same room of death as Akane (he is outnumbered, outgunned, and they do have _really_ good surveillance equipment).
*Soon after that, Venus and Jupiter are kidnapped, the truth uncovered, the rescue expedition underway. Before leaving, SM prays at the crystal column of prayers in the Silver Millennium and a strange transformation item appears with Ranma's rune. She takes it with her.
*Events progress more or less according the SM canon. SM gets kidnapped by demon hands.
*When SM breaks through, she brings all three transformation items so Ranma transforms and fights alongside Venus and Jupiter.
(...plot outline not finished yet)
#Focus: BM conflict
- I'd expect them to expend the cannon fodder first. Would they wise up? They are arrogant bastards but they aren't stupid.
- their main focus is still Rabbit.
- would they concentrate on the most irritating obstacle? Yes. The more their plans are thwarted, the more firepower they'd bring into the 20st century.
- leads to using the demon hands, there's no saving throw against that. Whom would they kidnap? Logically, Rabbit (but that would be The End, so it's plot-impossible) and/or SM. Whom I need them to kidnap, plot-wise? Akane, then Ranma.
- possible outcome: they capture Venus, then Akane while she protects Rabbit.
#Focus: Akane maturing
- she's seventeen but the Inners are more mature than her (at least in their judgement if not in their everyday behavior). That's a good plot point.
#Focus: turning Ranma from a rogue element into an dependable soldier?
A good one.
- minus: there is not much conflict between his dream and his duty.
- plus: there's conflict between his character and what he has to become (the Senshi are Lawful and loyal to their sovereign).
#Plot target: Ranma has to teach Akane seriously.
Obstacles:
- Belligerent Sexual Tension(tm) -- override by hardships together?
- it'd take ages for her to reach his level -- divert by focusing on her improvement and his respect?
- he's probably as losy a teacher as he is a schemer -- get outside help?
- too large a gap between them -- begin with Haruka? I'd have to stretch this into the S arc anyway.
#Plot target: they have to marry
Obstacles:
- the other fiancees
- too early.
- postpone to the Usagi@Mamoru's wedding keeping the love dodecahedron intact? Illogical but fanbase-wise.
What do you guys think of it? Should I continue with it -- or should I concentrate on my other idea, writing a GPL'd image editor to succeed GIMP and put Photoshop to shame in the great name of Linux?
P.S. Stupid OpenOffice for Windows, auto-replacing quotation marks for Russian even when I'm typing in English. The Linux version is smarter, it uses correct quotation marks depending on the Language property of the text.