Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

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Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Thu Dec 22, 2016 4:29 pm

I've decided to post something I've been working on a bit early.

Inspired by Shareon's"Identity Search", but from the other direction...

Selling the Fantasy. Nabiki finds a magical item that allows Ranma to control his curse. However it comes at a high cost.
Literally.
More than Ranma can afford. Nabiki has to come up with a plan for how Ranma can earn enough money to pay for the artifact, and a handsome profit on Nabiki's part.

But how far is Ranma willing to go to get out from under his curse?


It can be read here.

And a bit of a warning, since this is an early release it's a bit rougher than normal (hasn't had the full G &Sp proofing)
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Dumbledork » Fri Dec 23, 2016 2:25 am

I liked the first chapter. I just don't like it when Nabiki gets away with her scams. I hope it somehow will bite her in the ass.
And that's the bottom line 'cause Dumbledork said so.

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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Fri Dec 23, 2016 10:44 am

Dumbledork wrote:I liked the first chapter. I just don't like it when Nabiki gets away with her scams. I hope it somehow will bite her in the ass.


Thanks!
And hehe.
Yeah, Nabiki ends up having.... problems.
I'll put up ch2 so you can see how things start to get.. .out of her control.
(Though ch3/4 is when events start to really slip out of her grip)
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Dumbledork » Fri Dec 23, 2016 7:08 pm

Excellent. I like the side effect of the medallion, an with all the magic Ranma has been effected with over the years I don't doubt fro a moment there will be more to come. How far will the magic go? Maybe the accessories could become rela through the magic so that Ranma won't have to use any contact lenses or fake fingernails in his hostess form. And what about Ranma's quick acceptance of his female form? Is that also due to the medallion?
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Fri Dec 23, 2016 9:00 pm

Excellent. I like the side effect of the medallion, an with all the magic Ranma has been effected with over the years I don't doubt fro a moment there will be more to come. How far will the magic go? Maybe the accessories could become rela through the magic so that Ranma won't have to use any contact lenses or fake fingernails in his hostess form. And what about Ranma's quick acceptance of his female form? Is that also due to the medallion?

[Hehe, Glad you like it.
[And you're not too far off with the side effects.
[Not quite exact but close...

[And for the acceptance... why it's like this was a /Musk/ magical artifact ;p

[Tell you what, I'll post ch3 as well tonight.
[Thanks again for commenting.
[That'll catch things up.
[And I can start posting some of the fanart I've gotten for this fic.
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sat Dec 24, 2016 12:11 am

And here's a bit of art for Ranma's "Raiko Disguise" in ch1 and 2
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Dumbledork » Sat Dec 24, 2016 7:27 pm

Nice picture. Ranma isn't recognizble at all in her disguise. Why was she so afraid about confronting Ryoga? HE has never been able to see through the disguises and this one is the best so far.
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sat Dec 24, 2016 10:59 pm

Nice picture. Ranma isn't recognizble at all in her disguise. Why was she so afraid about confronting Ryoga? HE has never been able to see through the disguises and this one is the best so far.

[Thanks!
[There's more as she gets further in the changes.

[And another piece by another artist.
[(That one has Nabiki in her disguise too)

[And for Ranma's worries there's two factors first Ranma's worried that though some sense of cosmic irony a /good/ disguise will be something Ryoga can see through. (t
[But the bigger worry is that Ranma has a lot more riding on this disguise.
[She wants to use her Raiko getup to make a lot of money
[and that requires keeping the Nerima folks from making the connection between Raiko and Ranma.

[Now given how Ryoga acts around "Raiko" in ch3, one can see that Ranma's fears were overblown.
[Though the "Mrs Kuga" scene at the end with Akane does show Ranma still has some fears
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Dark King » Tue Dec 27, 2016 9:33 pm

Very interesting so far. It has shades of CRose's "Bunny's Delight" though obviously with far less smut (so far, at least, and that was not a suggestion in any way).

Looking forward to more. Particularly the artwork that illustrates Nabiki.
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Wed Dec 28, 2016 7:19 pm

Dark King wrote:Very interesting so far. It has shades of CRose's "Bunny's Delight" though obviously with far less smut (so far, at least, and that was not a suggestion in any way).

Looking forward to more. Particularly the artwork that illustrates Nabiki.



[Thanks for commenting.
[Hmmm in retrospect I can see a bit of the "Bunny's Delight" in the story.
[Glad you liked it!
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Wed Dec 28, 2016 7:20 pm

And here's the new pics.

One of Ranma and Nabiki.
http://sunny-temple.deviantart.com/art/ ... -651268166


And one of Ranma going to the next chapter in her disguise.
http://sunny-temple.deviantart.com/art/ ... -645897777
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Dark King » Thu Dec 29, 2016 9:52 am

Sweet. Awesome new artwork!

Any idea when the next chapter will be ready? This is one I'm definitely looking forward to.

Sunshine wrote:And here's the new pics.

One of Ranma and Nabiki.
http://sunny-temple.deviantart.com/art/ ... -651268166


And one of Ranma going to the next chapter in her disguise.
http://sunny-temple.deviantart.com/art/ ... -645897777
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Re: Selling the Fantasy (R 1/2)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Thu Dec 29, 2016 5:20 pm

[Excellent! Clad you like 'em
[The artists did real good with it.

[Alas I've been working on Blood Debts recently.
[I do plan to get back to STF though, given the... cliffhanger of some of Ranma's... plans ;p

[Thanks!
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