Blood Debts Ch1 (and ch2!) (R.5 / SM / DF)

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Blood Debts Ch1 (and ch2!) (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sat Sep 03, 2016 2:15 pm

I've hinted at this project before. But now I can start posting. In short, this is a Dresden Files crossover with The Return.

It can be read here.

It's a little bit different, but should be fun. I also tried to write it so that previous knowledge of the Dresden Files (or The Return) is not required to enjoy this.

And for reference in The Return this takes place after Chapter 34 and in The Dresden Files this is after the fifteenth novel Skin Game.

Expect ch2 shortly. (I've already written up to ch12, nearly the end, so I've got a good buffer for this)
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Re: Blood Debts Ch1 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sailor Sedai (Ellf) » Sat Sep 03, 2016 3:45 pm

Well, you have most of my comments on this already, but I'm going to take a quick reread of the first chapter for my own pleasure.
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Re: Blood Debts Ch1 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Ellen Kuhfeld » Sat Sep 03, 2016 6:07 pm

A few grammar notes:

The singular of magi is magus.

You called Kasumi a dower lieutenant once, dour the rest of the time. She was not acquired during marriage negotiations.

Once you named Mab as Mad.

Ranma's tail comes from the base of her spine, not her spin.

Where you said "a one Stobart" I suspect you intended "one as Stobart".

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Re: Blood Debts Ch1 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sat Sep 03, 2016 6:32 pm

Ellen Kuhfeld

A few grammar notes:

The singular of magi is magus.

You called Kasumi a dower lieutenant once, dour the rest of the time. She was not acquired during marriage negotiations.

Once you named Mab as Mad.

Ranma's tail comes from the base of her spine, not her spin.

Where you said "a one Stobart" I suspect you intended "one as Stobart".

Can't let them spell-checks get the bit between their teeth!

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Re: Blood Debts Ch1 (and ch2!) (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby DCG » Mon Sep 05, 2016 12:43 pm

Harry does like them tails. The shock of realizing there's no magic mystery field at work on that world, And that ever thing gets noticed and has reactions is going to be interesting for him to deal with.
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Re: Blood Debts Ch1 (and ch2!) (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Mon Sep 05, 2016 4:23 pm

DGC

Harry does like them tails. The shock of realizing there's no magic mystery field at work on that world, And that ever thing gets noticed and has reactions is going to be interesting for him to deal with.

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