[R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

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[R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Wed Nov 14, 2012 5:56 pm

Regrettably this topic was one of the casualties.
(Actually C&C was hit very hard)

Chapter 3 can be read here. fic/

Though it is being revised and will be considerably expanded and split into two chapters.
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Thu Nov 22, 2012 12:32 am

The new starting scene for ch3 can be found here

viewtopic.php?f=57&t=7070
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby talonhunter » Sat May 17, 2014 9:23 pm

Hey Senny... I was reading chapter three off the fanfiction dot net site and just noticed a glaring issue in the opening scenes. You have Usagi gushing over Ranma being a senshi while the waitress is still in the room with them
Who needs the light when the shadows are so much more...Playful

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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sun May 18, 2014 12:27 am

Ooooh.

Is she still doing that in the fukufics version?

I've been doing revisions to the chapters on things like that, and getting timeline snarls fixed.

Thanks for the heads up.
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Wharpt » Sun May 18, 2014 1:14 am

Sunshine wrote:Ooooh.

Is she still doing that in the fukufics version?

I've been doing revisions to the chapters on things like that, and getting timeline snarls fixed.

Thanks for the heads up.


"So cute!" Usagi said as she stepped around the table. "I should have known you'd be a Senshi. I mean with hair that pretty how couldn't you be? Who's your stylist, I know Ami and Rei go to a place in the mall right by our school but I think it's a bit too slow."

"Uh... " Ranma absently patted her curls as her confidence grew. The Princess had a bouncy energy that made her bunny-like hairstyle quite appropriate.

"I go to a little salon. Actually... it's right by here." The redhead lifted her arm and was about to point, but then blushed, and realizing she was inside, lowered her hand.

Usagi took her seat and ordered a soda from Keiko.

The hostess put down a menu for Usagi, politely nodded, and excused herself from the room.


I copied this from here - viewtopic.php?f=57&t=7070
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sun May 18, 2014 12:53 pm

Ah whoops. THat's not the version I meant, since it's from 2012 ^^;


This would be the most recent version out

fic/SH_ch3.htm
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Wharpt » Wed May 21, 2014 9:54 pm

Sunshine wrote:Ah whoops. THat's not the version I meant, since it's from 2012 ^^;


This would be the most recent version out

fic/SH_ch3.htm

True, but it's the same lines, word-for-word in both versions.
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Thu May 22, 2014 5:16 pm

Oh dear. My apologizes.

Truly sorry for the wild goose chase.

I'll have to fix that chapter.
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Re: [R 1/2][SM] Strained Harmony ch3

Postby Sunshine Temple » Sun Jun 01, 2014 8:53 pm

Oh dear. That took a while for me to get too ^^;

Okay, updated that line of Usagi's

"So cute!" Usagi said as she stepped around the table. "I should have known you'd be a..." The blonde glanced at the waitress. "Be on our team. I mean with hair that pretty how couldn't you be? Who's your stylist, I know Ami and Rei go to a place in the mall right by our school but I think it's a bit too slow."


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