What You Wish For 3

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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby Wharpt » Wed May 07, 2014 1:15 am

LawOhki wrote: Chaos? Why none at all! The three Saotomes are going to have a pleasant day out on the town. :mrgreen:


In Nerima :?: :?: :?: You'd need Kasumi or Belldandy along to accomplish that! (Maybe Both !!!)
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby LawOhki » Wed May 07, 2014 11:47 am

Wharpt wrote:
In Nerima :?: :?: :?: You'd need Kasumi or Belldandy along to accomplish that! (Maybe Both !!!)

What's Ranma chopped liver? She's a goddess too!

I guess it could be explained that Ranma is answering a wish from Nodoka to have a nice day out. Or its because someone else is meddling to mess with Mara and Akane more.
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby LawOhki » Wed May 07, 2014 10:44 pm

Invisible to everyone, a young girl sat on top of the street sweeper with her head cocked to one side in contemplation; her short legs dangling over the side. Quick violet eyes continued to watch the three figures until they were blocked by buildings before shifting her attention to the two cluelessly searching Demons following in their wake.

“I guess the game is afoot.” She smirked and kicked off her perch to land nimbly on the sidewalk, eager to cause mischief.

zx

Nodoka ushered the twin girls into a shop she frequented, a bell hanging above the glass door chiming pleasantly as it swung closed behind them. The store was smaller and for more traditional styles, the only attendant seemed to be helping someone at the change area. Looking at the twins, she couldn’t help but think they could do with something that made them look like young ladies. ‘Not tomboys dressing like boys.’ She noted, visually sizing up their matching too large male outfits.

“This looks pretty.” Kagami, the twin with the odd red furred cat accessories was already looking at a blue-green knee length dress with a white collar. “What do you think Ranma?” She asked excitedly and pulled it from the rack to hold in front of her body.

“Cute-- I guess, I’m not good with the whole clothes thing.” Ranma admitted, verifying to Nodoka that there must be a reason why the two wore such ill fitting clothes.

“It’s very nice. Why don’t you go try it on?” Nodoka nodded towards the girl.

“I don’t know.” Kagami spun the garment around and ended up checking the price tag. Her blue eyes widened dramatically. “I couldn’t.”

Reaching out, she caught the tag, and saw that it was a bit more than she had wanted to spend but this wasn’t an everyday outing. “Nonsense dear, I’m going to buy you each something.”

“Really?” Kagami asked hopefully, eyes shimmering with moisture.

Nodding, her heart went out to the pair that obviously didn’t have much in the way of money. “But maybe you and your sister should take a look around and not pick the first thing you see.” She suggested and placed her hand on Ranma’s back to encourage the less outgoing twin. Nodoka blinked several times when she didn’t feel an expected undergarment.

“Dear-- did you forget to-- wear something today?” She whispered diplomatically to the smaller red head. Visually she could tell that Kagami was wearing something but Nodoka had thought it had just been the water earlier with Ranma.

“Um-- no?” The twin blinked cluelessly at her.

“I mean, you’re not wearing a bra.” She dropped her voice even lower, knowing that some girls could be very shy about such things.

“Cause I’m a-- uh-- I don’t need one?” Ranma scratched at the back of her head and laughed nervously.

Nodoka eyed the girl dubiously. It wasn’t that the two girls were overly endowed but they were clearly in need of support as they grew into young women. “You’re a martial artist, right? Don’t you think you would be more comfortable?”

“Nah I’m fine, all I need is just a little hot water.” The red head boasted with another titter of laughter.

“Well--.” Nodoka struggled to figure out what meaning the strange phrasing actually meant. “How does your mother feel about this?”

“Wouldn’t know, I’ve never met my mom.” Ranma answered, looking away introspectively.

‘This explains so much!’ Nodoka felt terrible for the pair, assuming that neither had had the proper motherly guidance that they should have had in their lives. “And your father?” She asked, trying to find out more.

The girl with three blue tattoos on her face looked lost in thought for a moment. “He’d probably say something stupid about it being training.”

‘No mother and an abusive father.’ Nodoka concluded sadly. She would need to speak with Kagami to find out the proper measurements so she could surprise the girl who had rescued her with yet another gift. “I’m sorry for asking personal questions. Please forget I said anything.”

One of Ranma’s eyebrows rose before she shrugged. “Okay.”

“Ranma! Ranma! How do these look?” Kagami asked excitedly, trying to hold several blouses, skirts, and dresses up against her body while still holding onto the bag with her new school uniform in one hand. “What about this? This purple one maybe? How about this dress?”

Watching the tattooed redhead struggle to respond with wide panicky eyes, Nodoka decided to step in. “They all look nice, dear. Why don’t you two divide them up and go use the fitting rooms to see how they look?”

“Do you want to, Ranma?” Kagami all but bounced in place, but asked as though the question may thoroughly offend her sister.

“I guess if it’ll help you pick.” Ranma answered, her voice full of trepidation.

“Thank you!” The cat girl grabbed her sister and dragged her towards the back of the shop.

Nodoka smiled as she watched the pair, feeling wonderful that she would get to help the poor girls. ‘And it’s great that Kagami-chan seems to be making progress breaking her poor abused sister out of her shyness. Such a daring young girl to wear that complicated cat costume.’
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby Wharpt » Thu May 08, 2014 12:07 am

Hild checking up on Mara and evaluating the new god/goddess?
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby LawOhki » Thu May 08, 2014 5:26 am

Wharpt wrote:Hild checking up on Mara and evaluating the new god/goddess?

Schemes and plots.


Or she just likes to go about town on a street sweeper ruining peoples days.
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby Wharpt » Thu May 08, 2014 9:55 pm

LawOhki wrote:Schemes and plots.


Or she just likes to go about town on a street sweeper ruining peoples days.
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I'll accept that !!!
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby LawOhki » Tue Jan 13, 2015 6:35 pm

Ranma pursed her lips in thought as she stared at herself in the mirror. ‘I’m not much for this kind of thing.’ Cramped as she was in the small dressing room, she felt even more penned in by agreeing to help Kagami with picking something for the nice lady to buy. ‘For me too.’ She didn’t want to seem rude by declining the woman’s offer even if it was making her uncomfortable.

‘Three shirts and a pair of dresses.’ She had thought Kagami had grabbed more. It certainly felt like more.

Putting off following through with her agreement, Ranma leaned in close to the mirror to rub at the blue crescent underneath her left eye. The visible signs of her ascension were so small that she nearly forgot they were there.

'I'll just make sure to get stuff that Kagami can use if this lady is so dead set on buying stuff.' Ranma decided, having little overall use for everyday female clothing. Stripping off her damp shirt down to her tank top, she should at least see if the things Kagome had grabbed would fit, she was interrupted by a voice from outside.

"Ranma-chan, do you mind if I come in?" Nodoka's question was more of a statement as she didn't wait for a response before parting the curtain to enter the small changing area. "I found something else you can use." She happily announced and presented Ranma with a plain full coverage white bra as though it was an amazing gift.

"Um-- I don't really need one of those." Ranma shifted uneasily, not wanting to inadvertently insult the nice woman.

"A thin tank top is no substitute for proper support." Nodoka sternly told her and all but shoved the feminine garment into Ranma's hands. "I know it's not the hip style all you young girls like to wear but I'm sure you'll be much happier with it until you can find something more you."

'Nothing would be more-- me.' She didn't voice that objection and simply smiled vacantly hoping that she would go away allowing her to get this over with. "Well-- thanks."

Nodoka seemed to realize something was amiss because she suddenly started to fret with her hands. "I'm sorry dear, I know being doted on by some stranger must make you feel uncomfortable."

"No, it's alright. Just-- really Kagami is the one who really needs attention." Laughing nervously, she hoped that the cat girl hadn't heard that.

"I'm sure." The woman nodded, sounding oddly sarcastic and sincere at the same time. "I suppose I should leave you to get changed, I'll be just outside if you need anything. Oh-- did you want me to try and find anything else you may like?"

"I'm fine." She answered, noticing for the first time how desperately lonely the nice woman sounded. “Thank you-- though.”

"Remember, just outside the door." Nodoka reiterated and backed out of the curtained area.

'I wonder what's up with her?' She scratched at the back of her head with a free hand before shrugging off the odd feeling to take stock of the bra in her other hand. 'Yikes, this is way too big. What made her think this would fit me at all?' Idly holding it up to her chest, she blinked several times in realization that the cups almost looked too small. 'Were they always this big?'

zx

Nodoka struggled to reign in her excitement without allowing how lonely she felt from coming out. Neither of the adorable twins needed to know that she hadn't seen her husband or son for well over a decade. Or that the infrequent letters from her husband had stopped abruptly months ago. All she wanted was to spend an hour or two and get to play at being the mother she was never allowed to be for her son.

'Someday my Ranma will come home and he'll be an adult and so manly that he won't even need a mother. But, I gave up that role long ago. I need to be strong and fulfill my oaths. I just wish I could spend a day being a mother-- maybe even preparing a nice home cooked meal for two girls who obviously have a difficult life-- would that be too much to ask for?'

zx

Mara looked around in confusion at the growing number of humans in the street, having no clue where the god and worthless clone had gone off to. She had been too busy trying to plot what they were going to do to them with her student to keep track. "I know, If I just make a big explosion they'll all shove off!" She finally decided the best way to clear out all the humans and attract her query in one fell swoop.

"Idiot! You can't just blow stuff up." Akane groaned in disgust at her genius plan.

"And you have a better way to find them?" She asked sarcastically. Unused to having anyone question her brilliance openly.

"Ranma only likes martial arts, food, and being an egotistical jerk. Obviously they found some place to scam food. We just have to find the nearest store selling sweets and I guarantee they'll be there!" The new Demon loudly explained.

"Good job, my student!" She laughed heartily, amazed how how clever the short haired girl could be. Her laughter died when she felt someone tug roughly on her own long blonde locks.

“Ah! You got the nice hair, keiki.” A man skin so tanned it may as well be leather exclaimed as he continued to rub her hair between his fingers. He wore thick opaque sunglasses and sprouting from a shaggy bowl cut of brown hair was a tiny palm tree. Dressed in a brightly colored Hawaiian shirt and crop pants, the man stood out like a sore thumb.

“Excuse you!” Mara rudely snorted and slapped the man’s hand away. “Just who do you think you are?”

“So rude o’ me! Forgettin to introduce meself! Aloha! I be the big kahuna of de Furinkan High!” The brightly dressed man introduced with a heavy accent.

“Big kahuna?” Akane asked in confusion.

“De Principal, little keiki.”

“Oh-- I didn’t even know we had a Principal.” The new Demon added absently.

“You be a student at me school?” He asked intensely hopeful and Akane nodded in response.

“Who cares?” Mara scoffed and grabbed her student by the sleeve to start pulling her in the direction the God and clone had wandered off in. “We got more important things to worry about.”

“Now hold on dere, waihini!” The darkly tanned man hopped in front of her with both hands behind his back. “Dis be very important, but I gonna let you be ahead o’ de curve! All da other little keiki’s gonna be jealous!” His hands snapped forward to reveal that he was holding small metal devices in each hand.

“Eh? What are those?” Mara asked curiously at the odd mortal items.

“They look like old fashioned hair clippers.” Akane pointed out.

“Why just da most important tools for any big kahuna!” The man giggled madly.

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Yes I am aware that the Principal doesn't arrive for another 5 volumes, but whatever I do what I want. :mrgreen:
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby StarrySkyS » Wed Jan 14, 2015 3:22 am

Yay for more of this.
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby Dumbledork » Wed Jan 14, 2015 4:14 am

Didn't expect the big kauna to make an appearance. Well done. He's always good for a few laughs.
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Re: What You Wish For 3

Postby LawOhki » Wed Jan 14, 2015 4:18 pm

Dumbledork wrote:Didn't expect the big kauna to make an appearance. Well done. He's always good for a few laughs.

A small bit of trivia, but this is the first time I have ever had him appear in a fic. Originally he was going to come up and talk to Akane but then I remembered that his intro wasn't for several more volumes so he couldn't be very friendly with her.
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