Blood Debts Ch13 (R.5 / SM / DF) and Ch14!

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Blood Debts Ch13 (R.5 / SM / DF) and Ch14!

Postby Sunshine Temple » Tue Oct 17, 2017 7:49 pm

And here's ch13 of Blood Debts.

The chapter can be read here.

As you can tell the story's starting to reach it's climax.

Edit: Chapter 14 has been added as well!
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Re: Blood Debts Ch13 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Dumbledork » Wed Oct 18, 2017 7:32 am

I enjoyed the new chapter. Here are two mistakes I found.

powered rhino horn

Did you mean 'powdered'?

I found her was intriguing


get rid of the 'was'
And that's the bottom line 'cause Dumbledork said so.

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Re: Blood Debts Ch13 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Wed Oct 18, 2017 7:28 pm

Dumbledork

I enjoyed the new chapter. Here are two mistakes I found.

[Glad you liked it!
[As you can guess I had some concerns about how well BlackStone's "meal' would be received.

powered rhino horn

Did you mean 'powdered'?

[Yes, good catch!

I found her was intriguing


get rid of the 'was'

[got it

[Thanks for the corrections!
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Re: Blood Debts Ch13 (R.5 / SM / DF)

Postby Sunshine Temple » Mon Nov 13, 2017 8:50 pm

Annnnd chapter 14 is up!

Now we're getting into the mix of things.
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