Night Shift 5

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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby LawOhki » Wed Nov 05, 2014 10:45 pm

Diana lay with her head on her paws watching the television in the Mizuno living room. Ami’s mother was next to her occasionally reaching over to give her scratches on her head and behind her ears. The human woman was reading a book and occasionally sipping on a cup of wine. She hoped that the search for the future queen was going well without her there to assist. But it was clearly more important for the moment that she was comfortable and enjoying the creature comforts of the home.

She was just about to doze off when the fingers hitting just the right spot behind her right ear suddenly stopped. The television program had been cut off for a news anchor with a still image of a subway hanging over his left shoulder.

“Police are reporting that due to a terrorist attack at the Omotesando station, the Oedo and Namboku lines will suspend operations until all stations can be secured. Thirty three workers are currently unaccounted for and an unknown amount of travelers. If you know of anyone or suspect they may have been using the station within the past three hours, the police are asking for you to report the information to them immediately.”

“That’s just a block away.” Ami’s mother gasped and she hastily rushed over to a phone in the kitchen to begin dialing.

Jumping from the couch, Diana followed after the woman, and listened intently as the phone continued to ring without being picked up. Finally it went to Ami’s curt voicemail message after the sixth ring. ‘Father-- Mother, please be well.’ Reaching a paw up, she touched the time key dangling from around her neck, and wondered how she was supposed to accomplish her mission in such a big city.

“Ami, this is your mother, I need you to return my call as soon as you can.”

zx

Ranma didn’t expect to feel warm. He didn’t really know what he should expect to feel, unsure if he was alive or dead. The last thing he could recall was the monster girl sitting on top of him gloating, her orange eyes glowing with evil intent. ‘Ryoga.’ He sadly remembered her claiming to have devoured him. His last memory of the lost boy, weakly leaving the dojo came to mind. He had been exposed to fragments from a monster, could it have been infectious?

Slowly his eyes fluttered open to see Hotaru kneeling next to him in his room, her hands outstretched and glowing with a soft violet light, and a look of intense concentration across her face. Ranma reached up to gingerly take hold of her hands.

“I think I’m healed.” He smiled sadly at her relief.

“Idiot!” She lunged forward to hug him.

“I feel like I got run over.” Ami groaned, laying on the floor next to him.

A sniffling alerted him to Sailor Moon standing over them with hands planted on her hips, glaring down at them alternating between furious and crying in relief. “You too--.”

“Uh-- Sailor Moon--.” Ami started before they were both crushed to the floor in a glomp.

“Don’t ever do that again!” The blonde shook them roughly, completely ignoring that they had just been grievously injured.

“Okay, promise, you can let us go now.” Ranma wheezed out, catching sight of Sailor Mars and Jupiter leaning against the wall next to the door. Haruka and Michiru in their civilian clothes were blocking the door itself. He became aware of his mother kneeling behind him because she put a hand on his shoulder, clearly trying to restrain herself from showing too much emotion.

Venus was kneeling close by with Artemis cradled in her lap and Luna looking on disgusted from the floor next to them. “Really, I’ll get you anything you want.”

“I could really do with some tuna fish.” The white feline groaned dramatically.

“Of course.” She delicately set him aside next to Luna who was rolling her eyes now,
and vanished into the teleport network.

“Don’t forget my little fork.” Artemis added with a weak sigh as though he was dying.

“I’ll give you a fork.” Luna bopped him on the head.

‘Everybody is alright.’ Ranma relaxed and patted Sailor Moon on the back, hoping that she’d quit trying to crush them soon. ‘And they are all in my room.’ He realized in horror, quickly trying to figure out where Nabiki might be or either of the fathers.

“Snacks!” Kasumi announced happily and Haruka hesitantly stepped out of the way while Michiru helpfully took a plate of cookies, freeing up one of young woman’s hands.

“Snacks?” Sailor Moon asked distractedly, finally releasing Ami and him.

“These are-- uh-- I hope you like them.” Akane stuttered and blushed, following Kasumi in, and looking around in excitement at meeting more Sailor Senshi.

“Let me help.” Sailor Jupiter offered and took the second tray that Akane was carrying.

“Th-- thank you.” Akane stared in amazement at the tall Senshi.

“You make an excellent door.” Nabiki joked at Haruka who also towered over the middle sister bringing in a tray with glasses filled with juice.

“And you make a very lovely hostess.” The sandy blonde smirked, overtly appraised Nabiki’s form as she took a glass.

“Leave the girl alone, love.” Michiru snapped at her partner as everyone formed a circle in the center of the room.

“We have a big problem.” Ami straightened herself up. “The monster that attacked us knew Ranma.”

“How is that possible?” Sailor Mars asked as she took a cookie.

“Because I think it was someone I knew.” He threw out, not understanding how it was possible but it was the only rational answer to how a monster would know so much. The other Senshi all stiffened at the realization of what that meant while his mother and the Tendos didn’t immediately understand. “A-- he was my friend, Ryoga. It might not matter but when I fought some monsters the other day he got covered in the shards they leave. He seemed fine-- just a little weak when he left-- but the monster talked just like him.”

“Ryoga would never try to kill you.” Akane scoffed at the idea, earning a sharp glare from several of the Senshi.

“This monster, Ryoga or no, almost did.” Ami quickly amended. “She nearly killed Ranma with a touch, so don’t hesitate. I’ll send you all a picture I took with the Mercury Computer because she looks human except for orange eyes that glow.”

“If-- if it is Ryoga, aren’t you going to try and save him?” Akane looked to him hopefully, expecting him to agree with her.

“No.” Sailor Moon answered and shook her head. “No chances.”

Ranma slowly nodded, purposely ignoring the betrayal written on Akane’s face. “Even if it was Ryoga, anything that he was-- is gone.” He bowed his head, feeling responsible for not keeping an eye on him when he was weak.

“You’re not even going to try?” Akane looked around for support.

“Akane, I’m sure they would if it was possible.” Kasumi gently told her sister who continued to look like she had swallowed something sour.

“So Ranma--.” Nabiki suddenly spoke up, reminding Ranma that the middle sister was here. “I never took you for moonlighting in a tux?” She gave him a toothy smirk.

“He doesn’t.” Sailor Pluto answered, snaking an arm out between Ranma and Usagi to take a cookie, causing both of them to jump in alarm. He dove to the side to hide behind Ami while Usagi used Mars as a shield. “What?” The green haired Senshi asked and nibbled on the snack daintily.

“Don’t do that!” Sailor Moon and he yelled at the same time at a completely unphased Sailor Pluto.

“Ranma-- in one of those fukus.” Nabiki snickered and her eyes lit up in glee before realizing that all the transformed Senshi and the ones not in short skirts were looking at her with clear suspicion. “I’m-- just talking out loud. Not like I’d ever try and sell this info. I mean come on, murderous monsters are out there. I want you on my side.”

‘Why don’t I just tell everybody and get it over with?’ Ranma groaned, the number of people who suddenly knew that he was a Senshi had tripled in the span of a few days already.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby Dumbledork » Thu Nov 06, 2014 1:44 am

Please let Nabiki do something stupid that will come to bite her in the ass in the end. I always love it when bad stuff happens to her.

Nicely done here.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby Vocaloid » Thu Nov 06, 2014 1:59 am

Dumbledork wrote:Please let Nabiki do something stupid that will come to bite her in the ass in the end. I always love it when bad stuff happens to her.

Nicely done here.


Hehehe...more like Michiru and Haruka will bite her in the ass...^_~

seriously though, this is starting to shape up into a rather interesting issue for Ranma. I almost expected Sailor Moon to force Ranma's transformation into Thea to save his life because of the injuries he and Ami received
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby WG_Writer » Thu Nov 06, 2014 3:39 am

Dumbledork wrote:Please let Nabiki do something stupid that will come to bite her in the ass in the end. I always love it when bad stuff happens to her.

Nicely done here.


heh you ask this when LawOhKi has a Nabiki avatar...

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This scene seems very well done, I see no trouble with it. (The same cannot be said for Nabiki though ;) )
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby LawOhki » Thu Nov 06, 2014 6:35 am

Dumbledork wrote:Please let Nabiki do something stupid that will come to bite her in the ass in the end. I always love it when bad stuff happens to her.

Nicely done here.

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Vocaloid wrote:Hehehe...more like Michiru and Haruka will bite her in the ass...^_~

I could see Nabiki getting quite focused on the outers when she realizes the money that they throw around. Like Setsuna picking up a house near the Tendos just so Hotaru can go to Furinkan.

seriously though, this is starting to shape up into a rather interesting issue for Ranma. I almost expected Sailor Moon to force Ranma's transformation into Thea to save his life because of the injuries he and Ami received

Usagi's redoubt attack healed them away from death but they were still completely out of it. Of course if Ranma-kun was forced to turn into Theia then she'd be stuck that way for good. Which Ranma was about to do at the end and that issue is going to cause some problems.

WG_Writer wrote:heh you ask this when LawOhKi has a Nabiki avatar...

This scene seems very well done, I see no trouble with it. (The same cannot be said for Nabiki though ;) )

Now now, I'm not above doing horrible things to Nabiki. In Platinum I had Ranma turn her into a wyrm then treat her like a slave. In that alternate for REN, a deranged Ranma mentally tricked her and got her turned into a vampire slave before basically raping her. Cliched Fantasy I got a little something lined up for her and Akane. :twisted:
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby ckosacranoid » Sat Nov 08, 2014 11:42 pm

That scene is amusing and now nabs know ranma wears a fuku....sigh...there goes that secrect.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby Té Rowan » Sun Nov 09, 2014 8:30 am

ckosacranoid wrote:That scene is amusing and now nabs know ranma wears a fuku....sigh...there goes that secrect.

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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby WG_Writer » Fri Nov 21, 2014 7:19 am

sorry for taking so long in replying (and likely getting hopes up)

I was thinking about this situation and given what just happened I can almost see a "bodyguard" being assigned since he is outed. I also think that it would be Uranus/Neptune, though more Uranus, which would guard him while in the class room after a likely second assassination attempt. I also am trying to picture just how the class would be able to maintain some order while the bodyguard needs to keep the secret identity of Ranma a well secret as everyone in the school would swarm both and not to mention how Akane's public reactions would lead to further questions by the students.

We all know just how Usagi had reacted this time and I doubt she would let it happen again, but if Ranma/Theia gets mauled again she will not give Ranma a choice about being protected under the reasoning that both Theia has not called for help often enough in the past when she should have, and now the enemy KNOWS where she lives and who she is.

How this could work out in the Dojo I am not certain but I am imaging Genma being "convinced" (*cough* Hypnotised *cough*) into thinking he has a niece (or Nodoka), which for some reason needs to stay around the Dojo.

This would drive Akane up one wall and down the other especially if both "perverts" were there.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby LawOhki » Fri Nov 21, 2014 7:36 am

WG_Writer wrote:sorry for taking so long in replying (and likely getting hopes up)

I was thinking about this situation and given what just happened I can almost see a "bodyguard" being assigned since he is outed. I also think that it would be Uranus/Neptune, though more Uranus, which would guard him while in the class room after a likely second assassination attempt. I also am trying to picture just how the class would be able to maintain some order while the bodyguard needs to keep the secret identity of Ranma a well secret as everyone in the school would swarm both and not to mention how Akane's public reactions would lead to further questions by the students.

We all know just how Usagi had reacted this time and I doubt she would let it happen again, but if Ranma/Theia gets mauled again she will not give Ranma a choice about being protected under the reasoning that both Theia has not called for help often enough in the past when she should have, and now the enemy KNOWS where she lives and who she is.

How this could work out in the Dojo I am not certain but I am imaging Genma being "convinced" (*cough* Hypnotised *cough*) into thinking he has a niece (or Nodoka), which for some reason needs to stay around the Dojo.

This would drive Akane up one wall and down the other especially if both "perverts" were there.

Well the more simpler path is that Haruka/Michiru simply move into the same house as Hotaru/Setsuna which is very close to the Tendos. I think it was over on TFF but someone correctly figured out that the Outers are actually Theia's guardian senshi. Time maybe a factor if Ryoga shows up to go after Ranma again, but that time frame is so small that it would need to be 24/7 within arms reach Senshi guard duty to be prepared for it considering it's an instant pwning.

I have special plans for Genma.

Ryoga is reasonably smart enough now that if she realizes Ranma survived, she won't be able to simply walk up and surprise him. Other tactics are necessary and she would so love to drag out Ranma's pain. :twisted:
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby LawOhki » Mon Dec 29, 2014 8:29 pm

I will finish you chapter! I will end you!

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Ryoga drummed her fingers incessantly on the step she was sitting on, her orange eyes burning with cold fury. Back in the surgical gallery of Tofu's abandoned hospital lair, the new monster she had created sat nearby in a chair in perfect stillness. 'How dare she get in my way?' She simmered, unable to regain that ultimate pleasurable moment of feeling Ranma's life slip away underneath her fingers because Sailor Moon had to show up.

'She'll be the next one.' Ryoga resolved, wanting to take her time with killing every single person connected to Ranma.

"I wanted it." The new monster suddenly spoke, her voice completely flat and monotone.

"Huh? What did you want?" She asked, having not heard the former human speak anything up until this point.

"Her computer, I wanted it." The other monster added with the tiniest hint of anger entering her voice. Her eyes, the only visibly inhuman part of her had pupils that spun and turned with patterns like tiny fan blades.

"If you want computers, there are plenty around." Ryoga shrugged without caring what her creation wanted.

There was a soft murmur from the other monsters as Tofu arrived, storming in through a set of double doors. The partial human glared at her as he took a seat on the cheap throne placed in the very center of the room. He sighed audibly and any whispering immediately ended. Beckoning with his right hand towards her, he finally spoke. "Come here." He demanded like she was a dog.

"Why?" She asked, bored with his attempts at theatrics.

Tofu's glasses glinted dangerously. "Don't ask questions, just do as I say."

Slowly standing up and stretching her arms up over her head, she stalked forward towards the partial human. "I don't know why you're so upset, I just killed Sailor Theia." She explained, moving deliberately at a snails pace.

"A pig like you? Killing a Senshi?" Tofu broke down into high pitched laughter like he was a hyena. Around him, several other monsters joined in, stupidly following his lead. "At least the new girl knows to keep her mouth shut rather than make a fool out of herself with unbelievable stories."

There was more laughter that she ignored, walking right up to Tofu to be so close she could reach out and touch him. "So you've seen a lot of people live without half a rib cage?" She taunted.

"Healing magic, moron." He slapped her on the forehead. "All you did was give out the information that I knew who she was. You incompetent pork product."

"Then I'll just have to kill him again and again until there's nothing left." Ryoga reached up with both hands to place them palm down on his chest. "As good a plan as any, doctor?" She asked sarcastically.

"What are you doing?" He asked in confusion and shock, feeling as she started to drain his life force from the bits of him that were still human.

"I'm killing you, duh!" She scoffed and with a happy smile dug her fingers deeply into his flesh. "This relationship is at a breaking point."

Ono Tofu's scream of agony abruptly cut off as he exploded in a shower of blood, gore, and small black shards of power. The auditorium became deathly silent save for the wet parts of Tofu hitting the floor and walls. None of the other monsters said anything, most too terrified to breath.

"Yuck." She whipped her hands to the side, trying to wipe off some of the nastiness that covered her new clothes. 'Note to self, humans make a mess.' Realizing how doomed her outfit was, she daintily turned around, and sat down in the position formerly occupied by Dr. Tofu.

"Anyone have an issue with me taking over?" She asked rhetorically, primarily keeping her eyes on the bull themed enforcer who was waiting off the the side for an order that would never come. "Nobody? How wonderful." She leaned back and smiled.

zx

“I’m perfectly safe here, Sailor Moon.” Chibi-Usa grumbled as her mother-to-be fussed over her. Something that always made her uncomfortable. Not that she didn’t love Usagi dearly but in her mind there was a clear divider. Usagi from the past was simply not her mother, not yet. A big annoying sister, maybe, but certainly not her mother.

Thankfully with everyone clustered together, it was easy for a little girl like her to be overlooked in all the commotion. Ami and Ranma nearly dying was enough of a focus that they had accidentally given out Ranma’s position amongst the Senshi to Nabiki. So now he and his family were stuck making promises to explain things to her later.

The only thing that stopped the house from exploding was the fact that the fathers had been sent out on a mission by Nodoka to track down some unimportant item. While slipping them money to go enjoy themselves while all the women talked.

“Are you listening to me?” Sailor Moon snapped angrily and tugged on one of Chibi-Usa’s odangos.

‘Of course not.’ She briefly thought before answering and motioning for Sailor Moon to come closer so she could whisper in her ear. “I just think that they could use another Senshi here to watch things when Ranma isn’t around.”

“Ooh, that’s a good idea!” Sailor Moon nodded her head in agreement. “You should be a real butt kicker now with all that training, right?” The blond elbowed her and laughed jovially.

“How is that training going?” Haruka asked and roughly planted a hand on the top of Usa’s head and roughed up her hair. “Learning anything good?”

“I’m learning a lot.” She boasted without giving any details.

“We’re going to be just around the corner with Setsuna and Hotaru, so we’ll keep the little bunny safe.” Haruka boasted.

“And it will be good for Hotaru-chan to have someone to spend time with.” Michiru added as she came up to stand side by side with Haruka.

“I like it.” Sailor Moon nodded her head appreciatively at the idea.

“Isn’t it getting kind of late?” Chibi-Usa asked, already turning away from her future mother, intent on fleeing the uncomfortable situation. “I better go say goodnight to Hotaru-chan and get to bed.”

“Hold it!” Sailor Moon snapped making Usa freeze mid-step. “Bed? Early? What are you up to young lady?”

“Going to bed” She answered nervously even though she wanted to sound confident. Sailor Moon leaned in to narrow her eyes in suspicion.

“Sleep well and train hard.” Haruka suggested and tugged Sailor Moon away by one of her ponytails.

“Ah! Haruka-san!” The super-heroine whined.

“We have some adult things to discuss with the others.” Michiru added, helping to pull Sailor Moon away.

“Have fun!” She sweetly chirped and waved her hand at her eventual mother. As soon as Usagi could no longer see her, she rushed off for her room.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby ckosacranoid » Tue Dec 30, 2014 12:47 am

No more evil tofu..bummer. nice to see a update.
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby Wharpt » Tue Dec 30, 2014 1:07 am

Oh, how nice! Tofu, Tartare!
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby Dumbledork » Tue Dec 30, 2014 4:59 am

There really isn't any Ryoga left in the monster, is there? Heheh, Tofu goes boom!
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Re: Night Shift 5

Postby LawOhki » Tue Dec 30, 2014 7:22 am

ckosacranoid wrote:No more evil tofu..bummer. nice to see a update.

Unfortunately he was always supposed to have a small part. Supposed to be a bit of cosmic irony that in the past Kasumi had no clue he ever existed, and now in the present he doesn't get to confess his feelings to her. Even if he is an evil monster who just wants to possess her and doesn't really care what she wants. Similar to Adonis from Sailor V.

dumbledork wrote:There really isn't any Ryoga left in the monster, is there? Heheh, Tofu goes boom!

Whatever gave you that notion? The family that Ryoga killed as soon as she came into existence or the dozens after that? Getting rid of Tofu can be seen as a positive thing. :mrgreen:

If only Tofu hadn't been the one keeping the monsters more or less in check, trying to protect Kasumi from the perversions of that red haired harlot Theia!
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