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New fukufic

Postby P.H. Wise » Fri Dec 29, 2006 2:32 am

Title - Reflections of Ruin
Author - P.H. Wise (me)
Link - http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3312373/1/
Complete - Not hardly. It is only just begun, in fact.
Senshi - Sailor Saturn (transforms for the first time in chapter 1)
Type - Drama/Horror/Romance
Crossover - Cthulhu Mythos
Summary - A little over sixteen years ago, Hotaru Tomoe died a stillborn child. What does this have to do with Ranma? Quite a lot, as it turns out. A Sailor Moon, Ranma, Cthulhu Mythos crossover fanfic.
This was an idea that I've had kicking around in my head for almost six years now, which I finally ran out of the willpower to resist writing.
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Postby Akuma-sama » Fri Dec 29, 2006 3:08 am

Brutally short... Can't say much about how good it it because of that.
I'm curious as to how you'll tie the Mythos into this, though.
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Postby Lenneth » Fri Dec 29, 2006 7:31 am

Not a bad Fic, has potential.
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Postby Atlan » Fri Dec 29, 2006 7:38 am

Not bad at all.
Could stand to be longer, but then again I say that about everything I read. Including The Shaddow Chronicles.
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Postby P.H. Wise » Fri Dec 29, 2006 8:10 am

Akuma-sama wrote:Brutally short... Can't say much about how good it it because of that.
I'm curious as to how you'll tie the Mythos into this, though.

The Mythos elements don't really come in till Chapter 4. As far as its shortness goes, meh. I did only just start it.
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Postby Lenneth » Fri Dec 29, 2006 11:31 am

Chapter 3 is intresting.
Intresting portrayal of Nodoka...(will only serve to make things hell for Ranma later on)
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Postby Sunshine Temple » Fri Dec 29, 2006 4:40 pm

My only gripe is the short chapters, but you break them well, and the dialog and setting is solid.
Might want to slow down some of the scenes and have more description to firm up events.
I do enjoy reading this story.
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Postby Draconis Stelanaris » Fri Dec 29, 2006 5:23 pm

A tad short on the Chapter end, but so far so good. Hope it turns out as well as it looks.
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Postby Metroidvania » Fri Dec 29, 2006 7:05 pm

Indeed, the chapters are short, but it seems to fit with in with your writing style. Though you may wish to maybe lengthen the chapters a little bit.
I like it. Keep it up.
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Postby Dumbledork » Fri Dec 29, 2006 8:10 pm

Excellent. I especially like Nodokoa's behaviour. Ranma is indeed very manly ^_^
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Postby P.H. Wise » Sat Dec 30, 2006 9:48 am

Sunshine wrote:My only gripe is the short chapters, but you break them well, and the dialog and setting is solid.
Might want to slow down some of the scenes and have more description to firm up events.
I do enjoy reading this story.

I am giving that a try, actually. Attempting to slow down the scenes a bit, and stretch things out. Went from a 10 page per chapter format to a 15 page per capter format. I think I will probably try a couple different chapter lengths for the next little while, until I find one I am wholly satisfied with.
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Postby Draconis Stelanaris » Sat Dec 30, 2006 2:30 pm

Sound like a great idea. and this last chapter looks great.
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Postby Yrael » Sat Dec 30, 2006 4:37 pm

I've always enjoyed Ranma-Saturn fics. The length of chapter 4 was much more filling, but you can never have too much of a good thing. :)
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Postby EdenB » Sat Dec 30, 2006 4:46 pm

Although I should automatically dislike it for being Yet Another Ranma/Akane Fic (YARAF), it's actually well written and an interesting read.
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Postby P.H. Wise » Sat Dec 30, 2006 5:44 pm

EdenB wrote:Although I should automatically dislike it for being Yet Another Ranma/Akane Fic (YARAF), it's actually well written and an interesting read.

Huh. Although I tend to favor the Ranma/Ukyou pairing, I never did understand the hatred that many seem to have for Ranma/Akane.
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