I guess it depends on if your reading the story purely as a TF Fic, D&D fan, MMO, or a fantasy fiction fan. It succeeds on the gamer and fantasy fic formats, with a odd bit of humor tossed in over the gender confusion bits. But it is a Chinesse approach to gender issues, so it hides a lot of sub text as well. Look at the lead character. It does
Get better in my opinion in the story, but I am unsure if the current ark is for ending the story or to introduce a new element in the story...(=^x^=)