Exactly what Sprock said.
It just doesn't work out too well. And rather than really examining, you're just shooting justifications at us and getting defensive.
We're not out to fillet you, just say what we think because you all but asked.
And here's what we think, paraphrased.
"Needs Work."
Now you have a choice.
A: Approach the issues addressed so that your idea may seem more believable.
B: Ignore the issues, and stick with your idea. Which may work out in actual writing, or may result in people facepalming.
Mind you, if you select B, you've effectively wasted our time.
*Shrug*
But like I said. We're not here to fillet you. But a self-righteous-looking set of responses won't exactly change our oppinions. This is not my problem. It is your problem. You are the one posting the extended explanations, you are the one trying to convince. I am not convinced.
Idea has merit though. Work on it.