Another pre-fanfic post: Little Condo on the Prairie

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Re: Another pre-fanfic post: Little Condo on the Prairie

Postby khammel » Mon Sep 03, 2012 6:35 pm

DCG wrote:Nya~

Wow haven't seen this one in some time. Nice clean up job, i still dislike the opening. But its a very nice set up, and interaction fic.


Thanks. I am slowly posting my fanfictions on fanfic.net. If I think they would be on interest here, I post them. It has garnered some useful C&C so far.

Could you be any more specific about what you dislike? Wether it is fixed here or not, I would like to try to avoid problems in the future.


Thanks again!
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Re: Another pre-fanfic post: Little Condo on the Prairie

Postby DCG » Mon Sep 03, 2012 7:29 pm

It's more personal preference i think. My problem with the opening is how Akane is acting and thinking. It just sets a bad mood for the fic, and goes away so fast it kinda seems pointless to be there in the first place.
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Re: Another pre-fanfic post: Little Condo on the Prairie

Postby khammel » Mon Sep 03, 2012 7:37 pm

DCG wrote:It's more personal preference i think. My problem with the opening is how Akane is acting and thinking. It just sets a bad mood for the fic, and goes away so fast it kinda seems pointless to be there in the first place.


Interesting point. Since "Poison" is so pitch black, I figured Akane would be in that mindset the start. I also wanted the thoughts of 'HIM' to change over the course of the story from Ranma to Ryouga.

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