Heir 6 opening

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Postby TerraBull » Fri Apr 14, 2006 1:51 am

Yes, *LOL!* Nice! Questions? How many more Bottles does Setsuna have stashed away? Can the Formula's be revived and brought back to the world! I like the way that the Outers are portrayed, going from Grim and determined, to more like 'Old Veterans' that finally have a op to let loose and get rid of some stress, although, one may wonder what else may have gone on in the past between the group, how many poor places were devestated durring a drunken binge, hmm.. I still laugh at the image of a drunk Hotaru, flushed and more adult, as a opposite to the normally shy and frail one, can the Queen re-make the Outers to the physical/ fighting standards that Ranma would be proud of? I also wonder at them trying to do something out of a DBZ ep, the Queen taking the group to the Gates of Time, and trainning them, time passes diffrently, and when brought back, hardly any time has gone by for the rest, but now the Outers look more 'Amazonian' than normal Amazons.
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Omake?

Postby Innortal » Sat Apr 15, 2006 12:46 am

Omake:
Ranma ran back and forth, her silvery hair loose and flowing, between each of the four beds.
Really, she went drinking female, she woke up female, why shouldn’t she assume that she had spent the night female?
“Serenity!” cried out Setsuna as another painful contraction hit her. “If you ever do that to me again while we’re drunk!”
Ranma gulped. Really, she didn’t mean to knock up the Outer Guard.
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Postby TerraBull » Sat Apr 15, 2006 2:02 am

Dang, if that really happened.. Hmm.. the next gen would be *Very Strong*, who is the Mommy? *Laugh* Who guards whom from who? *laugh* just had the idea of the Outer's tightening ranks, to keep the Queen strictly to themselves, for 'protection'. :p
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Postby Dragon Man » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:06 am

Ranma is probably the only guy who could get away with getting Michiru and Haruka pregnant and not get castrated the next time they see him because he's half girl. I'm suddenly thinking of how strong the offspring of Hotaru and Ranma would be combined with Ranma's skill in martial arts and the power of Saturn... scary.
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Postby Innortal » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:19 am

Uniting the kingdoms, one girl at a time ... depending on available spirits.
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Postby Dragon Man » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:20 am

Innortal wrote:Uniting the kingdoms, one girl at a time ... depending on available spirits.

So in other words... someday there would be a single Senshi with the abilities and powers that each of the ones we know today posses? That would be one really powerful girl....
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Postby Innortal » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:23 am

Well, a Queen that changes into a King if she has someone to trust her power to ...
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Re: Heir 6 opening

Postby Nukem » Sat Apr 15, 2006 1:04 pm

Ozzallos wrote:...
The final combatant was passed out in the middle of the floor, as if she had tried to make it to the next room but was assailed by her arch nemesis, gravity.
"Why is Hotaru in her adult form?" Rei asked, stepping around the planet buster's long, luscious hair carefully.
...

Drunk Planet Buster?
I sense some desaster.
Ozzallos wrote:...
"She lives." Rei watched with raised eyebrows as life seeped back into the Senshi of time.

More like "It's alive" *eg*
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Postby TerraBull » Sat Apr 15, 2006 1:18 pm

Perhaps, but I was curious as to something else, Correct me if I am wrong, but Usagi has some telepathic, or empathic connection to her Inner Senshi, (Danger Sense, knowing what to do, sometimes, ect.) would the Queen have developed it with her Outer and Inner before Usagi/ The Princess was born, and if so, How long till it was back to Full Strength? As a Safety, would she be able to influence/ control the others in a bit of emergency override or something similar? How many other Senshi were comissioned before the end of the SM? Just not mentioned?
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Postby bishop_hikusaak » Tue Apr 18, 2006 8:08 pm

Man, I can't wait for the rest of this chapter! And yeah, a drunk planet buster is very scary.... Perhaps we'll be enlightened as to how Hotaru maifested her adult form?
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Postby WG_Writer » Tue Apr 18, 2006 9:30 pm

Dragon Man wrote:
Innortal wrote:Uniting the kingdoms, one girl at a time ... depending on available spirits.

So in other words... someday there would be a single Senshi with the abilities and powers that each of the ones we know today posses? That would be one really powerful girl....

Galaxia...
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Postby deathgeonous » Wed Apr 19, 2006 3:38 pm

Funny as hell! Thanks for the preveiw.
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Postby Atlan » Sat Apr 22, 2006 2:28 am

Omake:
It was a warzone.
There was no other way to put it, Usagi thought as she silently pushed the door open. The place was in absolute disarray; as if some major battle had taken place on the premises. She had seen places trashed by youma, and this one was every bit the battlefield. It seemed no part of the premises remained untouched, and it was all the guardian of love and justice could do not to power up into full Senshi mode right then and there. The blonde odango-atama nudged the door open wider, allowing a shaft of morning light to further illuminate the apartment. She cringed. To say the property damage was extensive was an understatement of massive proportions. Broken tables. Shattered lamps. Even the television looked like it had taken a critical hit or two.
And the bodies.
Usagi's eyes widened as they came into view. A low moan was heard from the Senshi of pluto, lying next to the boddies of Hakura and Hotaru, with Michiru hanging upsidedown over the couch. In Setsuna's lap lay their queen, her skin too pale and her eyes glazed over.
Setsuna gave a horse cough. "My Queen- First i watched you die a melimum ago, and now I killed you" She slumped foward, and Usagi ran over to her.
"Pluto! What happend? Why did you kill everyone?"
"Fire Whisky a thousand years old, my lady. They all had a sip- and i just sniffed the bottle" Setsuna grimased. "Now try and use the Crystal, before these dam spirits melt it!"
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Postby Raneko » Sat Apr 22, 2006 11:16 am

*reads rough draft*
Damn all thats really missing is a stripper.
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Postby b_omega » Sat Apr 22, 2006 1:07 pm

I've read somewhere, that wine alcohol percentage, cannot goes more than 20%
But then again, this is mercurian wine we're talking about.
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