The White Devil of the Moon Chapter 1

[bissek]

Disclaimer: I do not own MGLN or Sailor Moon

The White Devil of the Moon
By Bissek
Chapter 1
The Princess’ Guard

It was a subtle thing, something that a casual observer wouldn’t have noticed. Despite that, Fate immediately noticed the slight shifting of weight that indicated that Nanoha was no longer leaning against her as they walked because she wanted to, and was instead doing it because she needed to.

It was a sobering thought that due to her injuries and the months spent in either a hospital bed or a wheelchair, the girl that had normally spent at least thirteen hours a day training or working was now getting worn out simply by going on a long walk. Still, it was a great improvement over how badly off Nanoha had been earlier. There had been a point during her convalescence when she couldn’t even stand without something to help support her weight.

Fate’s worrying about her friend’s health was interrupted by a telepathic message from Aruf.

:Fate, I think someone is following us.:

Fate’s eyes widened in surprise, but she managed to avoid alerting her limping friend that anything was out of the ordinary.

:Are you sure, Aruf?:

:I’ve been smelling a cat – the same cat – ever since we left the park. A stray wouldn’t do that, would it?:

Fate had to agree. That didn’t seem like something a normal cat would do – assuming that it really was a normal cat. Fate had seen quite a few abnormal cats over the years, starting with the kitten that found a Jewel Seed and became the size of a house. Some, like the Lieze twins, were far more than mere animals. If the cat behind them was a familiar like Aruf or the Lieze twins or a shape-shifting mage like Yuuno, then this could be a problem.

But that wasn’t Fate’s immediate concern. First she had to get Nanoha back to their apartment so that she could rest. Once her friend was in bed, Fate could worry about the unusual cat and what it was up to.


It was strange to be fondly remembering the resiliency of one’s youth before reaching twenty, but Nanoha found herself doing it anyway. Back when she first started out as a mage, she and Fate both ended up with their Linker Cores getting forcibly drained by the Wolkenritter in their quest to restore the Book of Darkness in order to save Hayate. They both recovered fully from the experience within a week. How she wished that her recovery from her self-induced core failure was anywhere near that fast. It had been months since she had been injured, and her magic had yet to recover to the point that she would be willing to attempt a flight spell. The last thing she wanted was for her magic to give out on her while in midair.

Her friends were fully aware of her slow recovery. To ensure that she didn’t push herself too hard, they had installed a lockout device into Raising Heart that prevented her from fully activating the device unless she recited the full activation phrase that Yuuno used back when he had owned the device – and which Nanoha always had trouble remembering. Because of that, Nanoha was unable to use any of her more complex spells at the moment, reducing the chances of overexerting herself again.

Nanoha stood on the roof of the hotel she and Fate were staying in, looking at the night sky. Finishing the can of juice she had purchased from a vending machine, she weighed it in her hand a moment, and then tossed it into the air. A pink ball of light appeared next to Nanoha’s head and shot up after the can, striking it obliquely and knocking the falling can back into the air.

As the can began to fall again, the energy ball looped around to strike the can a second time, followed by a third. Beads of sweat formed on Nanoha’s forehead as she focused on controlling the spell as it knocked the can into the air again and again, counting the number of successful strikes.

Seven.

Ten.

Fourteen.

Nineteen.

As the spell came in for the twenty-first strike, it sputtered out and vanished. The can struck the floor, the dull clank of its landing sounding far louder to Nanoha’s ears than it possibly could have been. She sighed. Only twenty. While far better than her previous score of five, it was still much worse than what she had been able to do back when she was ten. She picked up the can and limped back inside.


Fate knew that Nanoha was practicing magic. She had caught her friend trying to see how far she had recovered with that juice can training exercise while she was still at the hospital once. She had agreed to not rat Nanoha out to her doctors so long as she only did the exercise once a week. So far, she had kept her word on that matter.

While Nanoha knocked a can around, Fate planned to see if that unusual cat was still around. She clipped a lead onto Aruf’s collar and headed outside. Her familiar would be able to smell out their tail if it was still there.


Luna had a problem. She had found her princess, and located where she was living, but she couldn’t get to her. Things would have been much easier if her princess lived in a house like Rei or Minako did, but instead she was staying in a hotel building. There had to be dozens of people living in there, and there was no way to easily tell where in the building the one person she wanted to talk to was staying (a talking cat walking up to the front desk and asking the clerk would just cause more problems, especially since she didn’t even know her princess’ name). There was also the question of how Luna was to get to the princess if she knew which room the girl was in. It would be nice if she was staying on the first floor in a room with an open window, but Luna couldn’t count on that.

Luna had been slowly circling the building, trying to figure out how to contact her princess without letting anyone else know there was a talking cat in the area. Her planning was disrupted when something landed on her. As she tried to pry herself off the pavement, she saw a red paw and realized that she was being pinned by the same puppy that had been with the princess. If the princess was with her dog, then this uncomfortable situation might end up working to her advantage.

“I’ve caught the cat, Fate.” The dog said.

The dog could talk? Luna hadn’t expected that. Well, if the princess already had a talking animal, then she wouldn’t be surprised by a talking cat. Her name was Fate, was it? A fitting name for a girl with such an important destiny.

“Thank you, Aruf.” A girl’s voice responded. Luna found herself being picked up by the voice’s owner, who she quickly recognized as the princess’ companion once she was at an angle where she could see the girl.

“Alright, cat.” Fate said. “I know you can understand me. Why have you been following me?”

Luna gulped. This wasn’t how she expected the meeting she’d been trying to arrange to work out. She began stammering out an explanation of her actions.

“I wasn’t following you. I was trying to speak with your friend.”

Fate’s reaction to her attempted explanation prevented her from getting much further than that.


The moment the cat started talking, Fate knew that her suspicions about its nature were correct. The moment it claimed that it wanted to talk to Nanoha, she knew that trouble was coming. And that the cat wanted Nanoha’s help in dealing with it.

Fate was intimately aware of Nanoha’s compassionate nature. It had only been seven years since the day that a young Nanoha had met a talking ferret and helped him recover the Jewel Seeds, never setting aside her quest despite Yuuno’s continual warnings about the dangers, even when the whole situation had become known to professionals who were fully capable of taking care of everything for her and allowing the girl to return to her everyday life. Fate knew that if the cat asked Nanoha for help the way Yuuno had, she would do everything in her power to help. She wouldn’t be able to help herself.

The problem was that Nanoha wasn’t up to helping at the moment. Her powers had yet to recover to the levels they had been at back when she had first become a mage. If she tried using her higher level spells at this point, she might be able to get a few off, but she could potentially trigger a relapse, damaging her linker core beyond repair. Fate had had to comfort a crying Nanoha many times over the past few months as the girl worried that she might never be able to fly again. If Nanoha pushed herself too hard too soon, that nightmare could become a reality.

For similar reasons, Fate could not help herself. If she did, Nanoha would find out about it, and want to help as well, with the same result. There was no helping it: If Nanoha was to recover, the cat’s problems would have to be handled by someone else. There hadn’t been any sign of problems that would be of concern to the TSAB, this wasn’t their fight. If the cat was capable of recognizing the Ace of Aces and coming after her specifically, then the cat knew about the TSAB, and could presumably contact them through standard channels.

Fate quickly explained what she thought was going on to Aruf telepathically. Aruf agreed; the cat had to be driven away.


Luna saw Fate’s eyes widen briefly in shock, and then just as quickly narrow in determination.

“I’m sorry,” the girl said, “But I’m afraid we won’t be able to help you. If you would care to provide an explanation of whatever situation you’ve encountered, I’ll pass it on and see if I can get you some assistance. That’s all I can do for you at the moment.”

Luna gaped. This woman was treating the fate of the world and the restoration of the Moon Kingdom as it if was some kind of minor bureaucratic issue that could be routed to the clerk at the next desk while she went on her coffee break!

“You don’t understand!” Luna protested. “I have to speak to your friend in person. This is something that only she can do!”

Fate’s eyes turned cold, and she let go of the cat. Luna landed smoothly, and then her eyes nearly popped from her head as she saw the small puppy transform into an enormous wolf-like creature, which started snarling at her.

“Leave. Nanoha. Alone.” Fate ordered.

Luna wasn’t sure what caused the sudden hostility, but the other talking animal looked ready to turn her into a chew toy. Luna fled before it could do so.


Nanoha dreamed. It was very unusual for her to dream, or at least to dream anything vividly enough to actually remember it in the morning. The last time that had happened was at the beginning of the Book of Darkness case when she was just starting out as a mage. That time she had dreamt of finding an enormous pile of sweet potatoes and eating them all. It had been so real that she honestly thought that she had been chewing on something. In the morning she woke up to find herself with a mouthful of animal hair and a very upset ferret. That had been the last time that Yuuno had slept in her bed.

In her current dream, she was walking down a hallway in a palace she had never seen before, wearing a formal gown she would never have been able to afford in real life. The hallway opened into a ballroom, hosting a formal court dance, something that Nanoha had only seen in movies. As she entered the room, a dark-haired man took her hand and led her into a dance. When the dance ended, she stared upwards into the man’s eyes lovingly. The romantic moment was abruptly shattered by an enormous crashing sound, which a part of her recognized as the sound of a magical barrier being brought down by brute force from the outside. Further crashes sounded as something started smashing into the walls of the building, interspersed with the sound of people screaming as all the people in the ballroom started running around aimlessly in search of safety.

Nanoha woke up. What had that been? She had never had a dream that lifelike before. It wasn’t just dreaming images. In her dream she had felt the touch of the very expensive fabric the gown had been made of, smelt the perfumes and colognes of all the other people she passed, which intermingled with each other in ways that didn’t always result in a pleasant odor. She could still hum the melody of the song she had danced to. It was almost as if she had just remembered something from a long time ago, rather than having her imagination create some random tale while she slept.

Looking at the clock, Nanoha saw that it was far too early to be up and about, even by her pre-accident standards. She pulled the covers back over herself, curled up to the sleeping form of Fate on the other side of the bed, and tried to go back to sleep.


Four girls, one boy, and two cats gathered at the Hikawa shrine. Once everyone was there, Luna began her story.

“I’ve found the princess.” She announced.

The Senshi all brightened noticeably on hearing that news. With the Moon Princess located, they would be able to find the Ginzuisho. With the princess and the crystal, they could finally take the offensive against Beryl and take her down once and for all. And then the war would be over. They could set aside their duties as Senshi and be normal girls again. They had been shouldering the fate of the world for far too long, especially from the perspective of girls who had taken it up mainly because they were the only ones who could.

“When will we be able to meet her?” Minako asked.

“That… is going to be a problem.” Luna admitted. “When I tried to contact the princess – whose name is Nanoha, by the way – I was stopped by someone who had been hanging around her. A blonde woman named Fate. She recognized me for what I was before I ever opened my mouth.” There was an exchange of glances at that revelation. There wasn’t a single one of them that hadn’t been surprised when they first encountered the Moon Cats. Someone who could figure out that a cat could talk on sight and find nothing strange about this was very unusual.

“The moment I mentioned that I wanted to talk to her friend, she turned hostile. She was about to set her dog on me when I fled.” Luna shuddered. “I’ve never seen a dog that could change from a fifteen pound puppy into a hundred and fifty pound wolfhound in a moment.”

The Senshi had far too much depending on their princess’ return to allow themselves to be thwarted by a girl with a magic guard dog. They began planning out how they could bypass the current obstacle and reach their princess.


Mamoru Chiba walked the streets of Juuban. The Senshi had agreed that since he had been the closest to the princess back in the Silver Millennium, he would have the best chance of connecting to her upon actually meeting her. He was walking alone; having Luna to conclusively point out the princess to him would also identify him as a friend of Luna to Fate, and since the Senshi didn’t know exactly why the other girl was so adamant that the Moon Cat not speak with the princess, it was best that they not draw the other girl’s attention.

Unfortunately, this also meant that he couldn’t have Luna guide to the princess. All he had to go on to find the princess was a first name, a description, and the building she appeared to be living in. He didn’t have the slightest notion of the princess’ normal routine, so there was no guarantee that she would be anywhere near she was spotted last time, and if she was new to the area, asking for her wouldn’t be of any use.

His wanderings around the area went on for hours. Mamoru decided that if he didn’t find anything in the next half hour, he would give up for the day and suggest that the various Senshi try this in turns. He never realized that searching for a person could be so frustrating. He had no clue if the places he was looking in were places the princess had just left, not gotten to yet, or never been to at all. For all he knew, she had decided to spend the entire day indoors reading a book.

Mamoru’s frustrated musings were interrupted by the sound of whistling. The song was hauntingly familiar to him, but he couldn’t place the tune. It certainly wasn’t something that would be played on any of the radio stations that he tended to listen to. But despite that, he knew that the song was very familiar to him. After wracking his memory for the name of the song, he finally realized that he had never heard the song in his life. Prince Endymion’s life was a different story.

He had heard this song in his dreams, as he relived events from an era long since past. And unless someone had recomposed the song, the only reason that someone would know that song well enough to whistle it would be if he or she had memories of events from the Silver Millennium – something that only a handful of people could claim. He started casually glancing around, looking for the whistler, and his eyes eventually came to rest upon a brown-haired girl standing outside a shop with a puppy.


Nanoha had been waiting outside the store with Aruf. They had forgotten that on a non-administrated world that wasn’t used to familiars, most stores would not allow creatures they perceived to be pets to enter. That meant that unless Aruf changed into her humanoid form, she would need to wait outside of most stores. And since having Aruf change forms in the middle of the street in broad daylight would draw a great deal of attention, the two mages were taking turns looking in stores and watching the ‘pet’ for the day. They would have to rethink that plan at the end of the day.

She didn’t pay any attention to the man on the other side of the street as she idly whistled. A number of other people had passed on either side of the street, and she hadn’t paid any attention to them, either. There were a number of shops on both sides of the street, and those people who weren’t simply passing through were looking for something in one shop or another. Had she actively noticed the man look in her direction and cross to her side of the street, she would have assumed that he had decided that the shop that he was looking for was on the other side of the street and crossed.

“Excuse me.” A man’s voice interjected. Nanoha turned to look at the man who she had casually ignored as just another shopper. Then their eyes met.

Nanoha was certain that she had never seen this man before in her life. Despite this, she was absolutely certain that she knew him somehow – and that seeing him again was one of the most wonderful things that could have happened to her in her life.


As Mamoru’s eyes met the girl’s, he knew that she was definitely the princess he had been searching for. The princess’ eyes widened briefly in surprise, then joy, before assuming a confused look, as if she didn’t know why she had been so happy to see him. He felt the same joy in his own heart, only he knew the reason why.

“Have… we met before?” The princess asked.

“Not in any way that you’d remember.” He answered. “I’m Mamoru Chiba.” He said, holding out his hand.

“Nanoha Takamachi.” She replied, taking his hand.

And with that, the first part of Mamoru’s mission was complete. Now all he had to do was find a way to tell the princess about her true past and her destiny without the story seeming absolutely ridiculous. As every single one of the Senshi had been inclined to not believe in the Dark Kingdom and the Silver Millennium until their first encounter with a youma, this could be difficult.

He started engaging in simple small talk, hoping to be able to convince the princess to give him some contact information so that he could arrange for her to meet up with the Senshi. His conversation was interrupted when a girl with blonde hair emerged from the shop they were standing outside.

“You should take a look in there, Nanoha,” The other girl said, taking the dog’s lead from the princess. “There are some things that I think Shinobu might like.”

There was no way that a mere man could defeat the female urge to go shopping. The princess said farewell to Mamoru, and left to go look for prospective presents for the mentioned friend/relative. After the princess had entered the building, the other girl, who Mamoru took to be Fate, walked up to him.

“The cat sent you, didn’t she?” She whispered in his ear.

“I don’t know what you’re talking about.” He lied.

“Please. Aruf smelled her all over you. I don’t know why you people are so obsessed with Nanoha, and I don’t care. The last thing she needs right now is to borrow someone else’s troubles. Just leave her alone. Do you understand?” With that, the girl held up her hand, and a ball of lightning crackled on her palm.

One look at Fate’s face made it quite clear that she would use her spell on him if she thought it was necessary. He slowly backed away, and left the area. He would have to meet up with the others to come up with a new plan.


Beryl stormed across her throne room. Her nemesis Serenity was out there somewhere. She was going to find that prince-stealing interloper, and when she did, she was going to crush her. So far, her subjects had failed to locate the girl. But they would. If they didn’t, they would feel the full force of her displeasure.

She heard a rumbling in the distance. Turning around, she ordered one of her youma to find out what the source of the disturbance was. Within minutes, it had returned with the answers she sought.

“My Queen,” The youma explained. “There is some kind of dimensional disturbance outside the palace. A rift is forming in the sky.”

“What!?” Beryl exclaimed. A dimensional rift could be very bad. It could mean that her enemies had found her and were attempting to pierce the pocket dimension in which she had hidden herself. She wasn’t nearly ready for an all-out battle with the Senshi. She strode out of her throne room, heading towards the rift.

The rift wasn’t very large. It was also high enough up that anyone making leaving it in an uncontrolled manner risked serious injury. As Beryl analyzed the rift, her spells detected that something was about to emerge from it. Quickly, she ordered youma in place to seize and secure whatever came out. If the dimensional breach was caused by her enemies, they wouldn’t be loose long enough to cause trouble.

The rift spat out a long tube with something clinging to it. After doing so, it started shrinking, the trans-dimensional fabric of reality repairing itself now that the object that was traveling between dimensions uncontrollably was no longer disrupting things. Beryl turned her attention to the object that had been secured.

The tube turned out to be some sort of storage capsule. Sealed inside the capsule was a young girl, perhaps eight years of age. Clinging to the capsule desperately was a woman with graying dark hair, battered by her dangerous journey but still determined to keep a hold of the capsule and its precious cargo. The woman raised her head and looked around, as if trying to confirm that her journey had finally ended. Beryl heard her gasp one word before passing out.

“Alicia…”


A/N: A note on destiny: In Sailor Moon, it is implied that because the Earth Prince and Moon Princess were lovers in their previous lives, they are destined to be lovers again in their current ones. I don’t find that plausible. I find the interpretation presented in the Deverry novels by Katherine Kerr to be more likely.

In those stories, two people with a strong connection to each other (positive or negative) in one life will be inclined to similar feelings if they meet in another life, but they aren’t bound to it. Reincarnated lovers will be inclined to like each other when they meet, making it easier for them to become lovers again, and reincarnated enemies will be inclined to dislike each other, making it easier for them to find a new reason to fight in the current life, but these are not set in stone. Reincarnated enemies can resolve their differences. Reincarnated lovers can end up parting ways. One’s previous lives might influence the person they become, but it doesn’t define them absolutely. Nanoha is not Princess Serenity. Mamoru is not Prince Endymion.

I’m impressed by the response I’ve gotten from this fic. I’ve gotten more hits from the prologue of this story than the finale of the previous one, and more reviews than any single chapter I’ve posted so far. My thanks to Phalanxx, Torgamous, MisterSP, MWkillkenny84, Gundam M, ariel stormcloud, Mega1987, Robby Cartwright, MattheqAC, Demon Lord of Blood, Enjael1, Bobboky and kylone (I’ve never seen anyone describe Nanoha like that before. But I’m afraid she won’t be stepping back into the role of Little Miss Gundam in the near future) for the reviews.

[DCG]

So... How badly would raging heart kick the crap outa the sliver crystal for horning in on its mage?

[frice2000]

as the princess’ companion

I'm not great at grammar but for whatever reason one rule was drilled into me mercilessly in college while working for a History degree was that unless you're talking about a very specific honored person or term the ending a possessive with a apostrophe is incorrect. The correct way to do it, even if it sounds totally weird and wrong and even if it ends in a 's' would in this instance be "princess's."

themselves to be thwarted by a girl with a magic guard dog

Surprised they don't jump to the conclusion that the dog or woman is a youma or working for the Dark Kingdom.

Prince Endymion’s life was a different story.

after 'life' inserting something like 'though' or 'however' feels appropriate.

A number of other people had passed on either side of the street, and she hadn’t paid any attention to them, either

Line feels unnecessary.

Very interesting and superbly crafted story. The introduction really caught my attention. Great work.

[PCHeintz72]

Interesting concept... Is this manga SM or anime SM?

Heh... kind of agree with DCG on Raging/Raising Heart.

I've wondered on what a mix of these series might be like, but this is my first experience reading a mere straight cross of the two.

On the one hand Senshi with Luna in charge, the other the TSAB.

It is almost a tossup as to whom is better. A well trained force but one whom has morally questionable intentions in the higher ups, or a less trained force supposedly out for 'love and justice'. Though with Luna in command... I do not think they will be as morally correct as canon.

I can state I seriously doubt Fate is going to let Mamaru pull remotely what occured in canon.

I really how you do not intend on getting the relationship resolved any time soon, and would really like to see some fighting with Fate and Arf on one side, and Senshi and Tux on other.

I can picture it falling apart if Fate and Nanoha is present at a youma attack when Senshi show.

Wonder whether TSAB has records of the Silver Millenium, and what Pluto thinks currently.

Potentially, I could see this going the Dark Lords of Nerima route.


Overall not bad, though I would have to see more before deciding to keep following.

[Comartemis]

Can't believe I missed the prologue of this little jewel. C&C mode: switch ON!

It is almost a tossup as to whom is better. A well trained force but one whom has morally questionable intentions in the higher ups, or a less trained force supposedly out for 'love and justice'. Though with Luna in command... I do not think they will be as morally correct as canon.

Felt the need to point this out: the majority of the higher-ups in the TSAB are just as heroic as the main characters (the ones we've seen, anyways), it's the seedy conspiracy operating in the shadows that needs watching out for.

I think you've got Arf's name wrong, bissek. Aruf is the phonetic pronunciation of her name but the subs always call her Arf. My grasp of the Japanese language is shoddy at best but it feels to me like calling Arf 'Aruf' is like calling Fate 'Feito'. Just a minor irritation here, leave it in if you feel differently.

[Mitchell]

To be fair the seedy conspiracy types are really highly placed in the TSAB, and have a LOT of clout. Even the brightest higher up
is not spotless...though really how many 'real world' equivalents would be spotless is another matter. However however bad and questionable the TSAB is
it beats the other option, being ruled by an monarch who learned her politics at the feet of Luna.

[Comartemis]

Just took a look back at the original idea thread for this series. Is Nanoha and Fate's relationship still the romantic type, or is their love strictly platonic in nature? If it hasn't been set in stone yet, I'd prefer the former, not just because I'm a NanoFate shipper but also because it would make for a highly entertaining romantic subplot to have Fate and Nanoha's present relationship be pitted against the "destined love" of Serenity and Endymion, and further enhance the notion that Fate is fighting against destiny for Nanoha.

[Mitchell]

True. I think that the talk on 'reincarnated love' depicted after this chapter pretty much means that Nanoha might have pre-disposition to think positively of Mamoru (I am assuming he displays the same kind of personality that Endymion plays instead of just a physical resemblance but otherwise its fairly shallow...though that might work with the 'love' of Usagi and Mamoru in any case) however there is no real 'destined romance' other than in the Senshi and Mamoru's mind.

[LiliandraNadiar]

is no real 'destined romance' other than in the Senshi and Mamoru's mind.

Which doesn't remotely mean there can't/won't be a conflict over that lightning-throwing blonde keeping their princess from her prince. With Fate just giving them a stink-eye and Nanoha trying to make friends. (Over the barrel of a fully charged Starlight Breaker)

[PCHeintz72]

Felt the need to point this out: the majority of the higher-ups in the TSAB are just as heroic as the main characters (the ones we've seen, anyways), it's the seedy conspiracy operating in the shadows that needs watching out for.

Ummm... no... I literally meant the morality of the TSAB as a whole, not merely the ones involved in the conspiracy, their values and sense of Justice (like the sentances handed down for Fate and Graham), why they get involved in situations, etc... I am not referring to Nanoha and Fate and Hyate, but the system as a whole. Morality wise they remind me more of the way Stargate SG1 operates, rather than Star Trek, if that makes sense.

In any case, this is the C&C, not a normal discussion thread, so will go no further.

[Mitchell]

But the entire POINT of Star Trek was a future where Humanity had outgrown our own petty selfishness and worked for something better. Yeah it strayed somewhat from that but Humanity in the United Federation of Planets is a incredibly idealized and unrealistic view on humanity in general. Now Star Gate SG-1 is not a show about the shining morality of the group.

The sentances might be at best grey morality but I would easily take their form of government over one lead by the political student of Luna.

[Comartemis]

Ummm... no... I literally meant the morality of the TSAB as a whole, not merely the ones involved in the conspiracy, their values and sense of Justice (like the sentances handed down for Fate and Graham), why they get involved in situations, etc... I am not referring to Nanoha and Fate and Hyate, but the system as a whole. Morality wise they remind me more of the way Stargate SG1 operates, rather than Star Trek, if that makes sense.

In any case, this is the C&C, not a normal discussion thread, so will go no further.

I knew what you meant and I say you're completely full of shit but you're right, this ain't the place for that sort of discussion.

[Sky]

Nice start.

Seeing Arf's name spelled as "Aruf" threw me for a bit.

When Fate confronts Mamoru, I figured he had three choices: (1) get snarky or sarcastic like in the anime, (2) explain that he believes that someone is after Nanoha and that he and some friends are "soldiers" of sorts or (3) both. When he did neither and backed off, I was surprised. The only problem is proving it to Fate.

As for romance, I think it's a long way coming. Nanoha's going to be upset about being weak, and I doubt that she'd respond overly well to romantic overtures from Mamoru.

[PCHeintz72]

As for romance, I think it's a long way coming. Nanoha's going to be upset about being weak, and I doubt that she'd respond overly well to romantic overtures from Mamoru.

Huh... is this a Nanoha/Mamaru match? Based on the author notes at the end, I had thought it was not.

[Comartemis]

I sincerely hope not. Mamoru is NOT one of my favorite anime dudes and I think he and Nanoha are not very well-matched for each other.

I don't know about the rest of you but it feels to me like Nanoha is being enthralled by the destiny thing more than feeling legitimate attraction to Mamoru. When Tux-boy and Usagi first met in canon Usagi couldn't stand the guy for most of the season even with the whole soulmates thing going for him; it took her a while to warm up to the guy to the point where their arguments turned into friendly banter, and so it felt more natural and less forced for them to fall in love before the season was over. For Nanoha to get the warm fuzzies just by meeting the guy says to me that destiny is making up for lost time and trying to shoehorn her into the relationship, even if bissek is insisting that the soulmates business carries less weight now than it did then.

More to the point, though, Nanoha's already found her purpose in life as a flight instructor and bureau mage. She can't do that and be Princess Serenity at the same time, assuming that Crystal Tokyo is still in the works, which means that destiny is opposed to what Nanoha wants, therefore destiny -- and by extension, the Endymion/Serenity pairing -- must be CRUSHED with extreme prejudice.