Temple of Ranma's Sailor Senshi Seifuku

Ranma having to get creative at the end there was an interesting shift. You could tell it gets worse as she nears the point of the rip.. Energy or "power" didn't seem to be an issue. Her silver side and her brood in the area keep up with any she needed.. material however seemed to come up ...

Woo there's a lot more here now and it's looking good. Ranma dealing with the nekoken should be interesting. And i think ranma's lines of "im a guy" are going to get a lot more looks of disbelife as the progress of the digivols keeps going.

Ahh yes, the final form of the anything goes. Salamon has learned well under ranma and genma.

Water attacks incoming eh? well Jenrya is about to get an eye full later.

Chapter looks good, and im a bit curious as to how you handle nabiki. Both ranma and genma seem rather protective of solmon

Looks good, tho this is a small bit there isnt to much to comment on. Did he pass ranma? Or is that some one else of note we should know?

Wait.. what did you do? You ended the fight twice, or something odd. Missplace scenes?

Good opening, and good hooks so far to keep readers interested. Might want to clear up abit about what ranma meant about his backpack. Unless its vague on purpose.

Looks good! The boidace middle deal, really add's to it.

WOah.. i didn't think it was possible but that may be to much lace.

Would look better with her middle and sholders bare i think. Or corse to make up for it toss in lace frilles and trim.

Got the next chapters on FF.net all ready? There're looking good, tho im assuming you have an overall plot that reaches past just building a jet at hogwarts.

Lets break it in. Recently there's been a hell of a breakthrough http://youtu.be/6XJDUY4OYX0 This has brought to mind interesting points i was thinking of before about life stile and world effects to having much better power storage. I was thinking on it for a plot im poking, how introducing power c...

Steams been updating like crazy but i don't think that's it. I've not done any major system updates. Well windows ninja updated a couple days ago but i had problems before that.

Does this file help? https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B9rmsi1bfoS4bkNGS0hodDVLYzg/edit?usp=sharing Program : FalloutNV Ram: 8gig install, under 4gig running Win7 System age and win7 install is.. unn years? more then 4.. I've had a few bsod's they seem to hit when ever the video card is working on som...

Any one around that can give me some advice? I got bluescreenviewer that gives me info on the crash. But i don't really understand whats going on or the problem from the info dump.

Whats it about? If your going to sell the book to us, at lest toss out some hooks