Perhaps it's because at least for me I think you're a talented writer who has buried that talent under loads of junk. I was kind of hoping my comments about hurting you would knock you out of just that. But instead it obviously hasn't, which is a shame. But if you really don't want to hear from me a...
and a couple and their child stepped Too perfect. Inject personality. Usagi and Usa seem to constantly needle each other. Where is that sort of thing? If it has to be about clothing which seems to be a thing you love have her saying something about how gaudy Usagi's dress is and how hers is better....
Considering that Beryl was totally willing to bind herself to a demon from the Sun that wanted to consume all life to get her man...And Serenity was pretty much the exact anti-thesis to that. Plus that the Silver Crystal which was used by both of them was always a life bringing and purifying tool, f...
I'm not saying her being happy she's doing this. But you're giving someone you just met a lot of power. Serenity is not some evil queen, in fact she seemed to rule a pretty prosperous long lived kingdom, that we haven't seen has some super ugly underside. That and the Senshi are her immortal warrior...
Black Ops and operators are all well and logical. Serenity being an unfeeling lack of warmth bitch when she's doing her spell to create a new senshi...That doesn't feel right.
I'd give Serenity a bit of a nicer side then all the darkness from that last bit. Let her still be a positive figure, while realistically still needing someone like the new senshi you're developing. So still show compassion here, not just being so manner of fact. That'd instantly make the not at all...
Elementary School? Psh. Nodoka asks about schooling, Usa pulls out a few dozen diplomas, and Nodoka just nods. Then a couple weeks later tells her to go to back to University and get her Doctorate!
important his needs were than everybody else's. Could mix that in with the previous age and darkness bit and make it better. He thinks he's the hero, not that he's forcing his needs above theirs and is only taking the just reward in response to being the best most magnanimous teacher ever. At least...
in all seriousness, I'm imagining her outright threatening Usa with grievous bodily harm (and likely enacting (relatively) minor bodily harm) before just giving her the cold shoulder. And not the childish "did you hear something?" kind, but the serious "as far as I'm concerned you do...
It is plausible, but it's kind of been done to death. So I think it could be much more interesting if Ranma and everyone else is all surprised that Akane isn't getting jealous by the monster girls obvious affection for Ranma but Akane just doesn't see it. Just sees the girl as needing help and Ranma...
Kind of a cute idea, though it is attached to half a cross that's a bit too ecchi for my tastes. That said my one suggestion would be cut out a bit of the jealousy from Akane and the Tendo's. The poor girl has been abused and she's grasping at whoever offers her support. No reason to be jealous...yet.