Temple of Ranma's Sailor Senshi Seifuku

You may have a point there. I treated that first chapter as something to get out of the way - nothing more than a quick setup - before I could get to the story itself. I don't see that as a particularly grave flaw as that's essentially what the chapter is but I could have put more into it.

To be honest, I just didn't think it was interesting enough to spend a lot of time on that sort of thing in the setup. We've all seen it before in stories like this & we all know how it's going to end. I pretty much agree with you that they would/could/should have tried those things (I don't thi...

Sometimes less is more. A novel length post that looks to be mostly wiki copy/paste is a bit on the absurd side.

Chapter Twenty-Six

Hopefully the next chapter will come a little quicker.

Ah. But the Narutoverse isn't known for having powerboats (or other self-propelling vehicles) so I automatically perceived this word as an "unknown application of a known word as a human trait". Like with the "powerhouse", you know. Naruto is nothing if not inconsistent in its t...

For a heartbeat, Ranma stopped to be proud of his student: Maybe it's me but the phrase feels wrong. Did he stop being proud of her? He stopped for a moment, in the fight, to be proud of her. with a clone of himself at the wheel she couldn't quite prise herself away I must admit to not seeing anyth...

Chapter 25 now available:

Chapter Twenty-Five

Ranma as a medic type? Well, that's something I didn't expect. I can only think of a couple of good fics that had Ranma specialize in medicine. Sweet! And as both Tsunade and Kabuto show, medic nin != wimp. I've seen it a few times over the years but only ever in one-shots or unfinished fics that d...

Medic-nin Ranma? Yeah, that is cool! Very cool! And somehow Ranma seeking out and getting the tutoring of a sannin in order to fight Orochimaru fits, and Tsunade seems the best one for him, since he isn't the sort to tolerate Jiraiya due to the girl-curse and Jiraiya being a 'super pervert'. (He le...

chakra and ki are basically the same thing only chakra is build up over time and the hand signs are used as a trigger to focus it. while ki is focus by the will, becuase of this most of the things ranma, ryoga and mouse has done would be considered a kinjutsu especially Moko Takabisha and shi shi h...

I used itachi because I can see ranma going to odds with the uchiha and sharingan in general. Ranma really hates when people get free power ups, often resulting in him stooping to extremely petty and deceitful things because of it. A great example would be the super soba noodles and the battle-doug...

I tried to find something to nitpick on, but it's too smooth and solid, I just slid off. :lol: That's quite the compliment. Thanks. Other than that, I like the tone of your story, the characters not being white and fuzzy and cuddly towards each other. Ha, yeah. I just have to be careful it doesn't ...

a great way to get ranma out of his funk is to have him meet itachi. i suspect that ranma acting this way becuase orochimaru has proven he isnt immortal. think about it every time someone was kidnapped or in danger no matter who it was or what he had to do he always prevailed. with anko dead he see...

Something I'd note is that by some time after Herb and before Saffron Ranma's soul of ice and moukou takabisha no longer seem to require certain emotions. He went through quite a bit of emotional states against Saffron while maintaining a cold aura for instance, and I wouldn't say that was entirely...

Chapter Twenty-Three
Chapter Twenty-Four

I forgot to update the thread when I got my last draft ready, but now it's two for the price of one.