Temple of Ranma's Sailor Senshi Seifuku

Good chapter, characterizations still well done and the story flows well. I only have one minor issue with the story as it is. I still get a bit confused though by the new names, but I'm not sure how to correct that as "double naming" the characters from time to time -- would probably make...

Good work. The characterizations of Misiki & Funaho were dead on. Azuza, yep him too. Particularly liked Washu's conversation with Ranma regarding the use of magic and the reason for the limiter. Good use of the canon with Seryio as well. Pacing was good too. I'd like to have seen a "negati...

Personally. I'd like to see Narcissa be a good influence (well as good as she can be given the circumstances). Shopping and showing off Lina. Definately. Lina's a little young to be trying to find dates for ... and given Narcissa's initial reactions I don't see her trying to set up Lina yet. Plus sh...

I like the flow better this way (as opposed to them going to Nodoka's without Ranma).

It was also interesting to see the younger Tendo's in action. I particularly like the Kasumi/Nabiki manga portion.

Much cleaner, more readable and overall much improved. The flashback segments are working (at least for me) in that "some" background is being revealed yet we aren't "stuck" with Ranma/Rei as a little kid. Nice interactions between Ranma & grandpa. I thought the touch with th...

This is an old fic (and not the fic by Togashi Gajinn) In it at some point Nodoka lets Ranma know she is actually Athena the Greek Goddess of Wisdom. The go to some kind of "other dimension" where they can talk. I believe that it this fic is also a Tenchi cross -- but it's been so long tha...

Nice start. Good twist to make Ranma effective... but only to a very limited degree. Ie her attacks were enough to damage Mara, but not severely. I like the "mom" angle. Can't wait to see their expressions when Kami-sama so explains ... though Urd has laid the groundwork. Be interesting to...

Interesting to say the least. I love the way you have the old perve using "training" as an excuse ... how the "other" women are interpreting the training ... and just how naive "Naru" is. Maybe its a "popcorn" fic ... but so far a fun ride and interesting.

Overall a nice addition. Not gonna try a grammar check and many (who are probably better at it than me) have already done so. I like how Nodoka is being presented. Much sharper than normal ... yet with a psychological twist that goes a long way towards explaining her actions. Well done. I like the w...

Oopps. Never meant to imply it was explained to the reader. It did make some sense given what she was trying to do... and combined with the events of Ch. 1 I could see it working as she had hoped. A nice bonus is that it does provide a framework for Ranma to accept (to some degree at least) her acti...

Wow. A compelling story so far, and given it's promise I expect that to continue. The confrontations at the shelter ... all of them well done. Particularly liked Ami's realization as to Ranma's condition. The suspcion of the senshi as to the Cult's purpose. AND defiantely Moons desire to heal and th...

Bwhahahah. Loved it! I always do (regarding your stories) at least so far. I'm not so sure that there's nowhere to go with it. I see lots of possibilities. After all Ranma hasn't changed (yet) be interesting to see how Pluto encourages him to grow. The "Old fiancees" are still there ... de...

This chapter still reads smoothly. Nabiki's "treatment" of Ranma explained. Not saying I agree with it ... or that given his past it would work... but then again I'm not sure what would absent a shock of this magnitude. Still nicely done. This is a good fic and definately deserves to be wo...

Solid chapter. Nice twist with having Ranma's aunt playing "chaperone" ...or not. Helped the believeability factor of doing it with the girls still in the house. Like the interaction with the clan girls ... willing to be patient to get what they want. As has been mentioned the Cologne segm...

I is a nice starter chapter. Particularly liked the conversations between Ranma and Nabiki (as well as the inner thoughts).

The "cute couple" scene was well done too.