Temple of Ranma's Sailor Senshi Seifuku

I like this story so far, I did not notice any errors in this, just waiting for more.
keep it coming
Fafhrd

I have to add my kudos to the rest. Good Job 2 points, take'em or leave'em. I do have a hard time believing Ranma hasn't been discovered, he used his real name, and is using a variation on a previous disguise. Even if it is as a girl. Oh wait, Setsuna just smiles whe Ranma brings it up. Thought So. ...

The rewrite did clear up some continuity errors and make for a better read over all. Is there a new chapter coming at the end of the rewrites?

This is well written, there was nothing that stood out to me as an error. I like the way you have handled the combination of the personalities, particularly how she now seems to know everything, though she is still shying away from the rougher memories to an extent.
Looking forward to more.

Ok,
I am not familiar at all with the Chrono Crusade Manga. Overall this is well done, and I would read more if written. I saw no obvious mistakes or errors.
Keep it up, even if the response seems slow.

"You're not going to see her naked," Rei stated as she bared the entrance to the Company locker room Well, Usagi has bared herself but I think Rei should have barred Ranma from entering Usagi glared at the redhead. "That's no justification. I'm really am a monster. I'm going to destr...

"You heard the, princess," You heard the Princess - don't think you need the coma there, not sure on the capitalisation Nabiki, who had quietly followed, had been watching, and had a retort ready, but decided this was Mother's job. Eliminate the and from and had a retort, and only works a...

this didnt sound right: "She's also not under 5 feet tall, nor is the younger sister. Of course she was also not a succubus either." nor is SHE the younger sister works better for me, the original way seemed awkward, it is probably correct either way "And are you the amoral grifter wh...

Overall I enjoyed this chapter, there were some interesting twists. I did think the sections with Kodachi were lacking somewhat, mainly in that there wasn't a conclusion to it. Will there be more with her later? Nariko seems to be developing into a more interesting character than earlier chapters in...

Glad to see more from you.
I have to agree with the privious posters that the dialog was sometimes confusing.
Overall it got my attention.
Looking forward to more, but I first I better go reread the previous chapters as I am sure I have forgotten half the story.

Well, I liked this.
There are several questions such as the two women having a kid thing.
My other big concern is knowing what the odds are of this continuing - It has great potential.

This looks way too much like an Uber Ranma fic, without Ranma. Instead you have replaced Ranma with Mary Sue http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mary_Sue . Ditch the overlong description of "Ichigo sue" and develop the character by showing us through story elements and scenes. Describe her as she...

Well, I enjoyed this the first time on FF.net. Glad to see its getting some work now. I read this the other day but due to a problem with my account I was unable to reply. Unfortunatly that means I forgot any specific Items I wanted to point out. I seem to recall that there weren't very many anyway....